Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this bar chart illustrated the contribution of Australian men and women in several age categories who did daily based activities durable in 2010.

overall, it clears that daily physical activity has higher ratio in female rather than men category. In teenager ladies has good satemina to perform exercise on daily basis while in old age they participate equally.

firstly, male stood at the 52.8% while female stood at 47.7% in teenage category and man had higher percentage in regular activities. noticeable increase over a period in percentage between the age of 45 to 64 that is 53.3% and 53% respectively.

secondly, at the age of 65 and above the regular physical activity slowed down in both male and female. male had lower physical activities than female.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the data provided in the chart (e.g., stating males had a higher percentage in the teenage category when the chart shows the opposite). The overview is also somewhat contradictory. To improve, ensure you carefully transcribe the data points and provide a more comprehensive summary that highlights the key differences and trends across all age groups rather than just selecting a few points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of clear cohesive devices and some confusing transitions. For example, the use of 'firstly' and 'secondly' is mechanical and does not effectively link the comparisons. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'conversely', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices or non-standard collocations, such as 'daily based activities durable' and 'teenager ladies has good satemina'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the report. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'peaked'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs will also help you provide a more sophisticated analysis of the trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('it clears that', 'teenager ladies has'), article usage, and sentence structure. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors makes the writing feel unpolished. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly before nouns. Practicing complex sentences with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions would also help improve your range.

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