Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, it can be show that female are high doing physical activity, and female are increased over the age group. In contrast, men are high but it is decreased over the age group.

To begin with, 52.8% of men aged 15 to 24 did regular physical activity, compared with 47.7% of women. The percentage for men then decreased to 42.2% among those aged 25 to 34 and reached its lowest point of 39.5% for the 35 to 44 age group. After that, it increased gradually to 43.1% for people aged 45 to 54 and 45.1% for the 55 to 64 group. Finally, it rose slightly to 46.7% among those aged 65 and over.

In contrast, the percentage of women increased from 47.7% in the 15 to 24 age group to 48.9% among 25 to 34-year-olds. It then rose to 52.5% for the 35 to 44 group and reached a peak of 53.3% among women aged 45 to 54. The figure remained almost unchanged at 53% for the 55 to 64 group before falling to 47.1% among women aged 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully identifies the main features and provides a clear overview. You have selected relevant data points to support your descriptions, such as the peak for women in the 45-54 age group and the low point for men in the 35-44 group. However, the overview paragraph is slightly inaccurate; you state that 'female are high doing physical activity' and 'female are increased over the age group', which is not entirely supported by the data, as the trend for women fluctuates rather than consistently increasing. To reach a higher band, ensure your summary accurately reflects the overall trends observed in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on men and women respectively. The use of cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'To begin with', and 'After that' helps guide the reader through the data. However, the referencing is occasionally mechanical, and the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is generally clear, making the information easy to follow throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'regular physical activity', and 'reached a peak'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as 'it can be show' (should be 'shown') and 'female are high doing' (should be 'women are more active'). These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using more varied reporting verbs and ensuring correct word forms when describing statistical trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'female are high' instead of 'women have higher levels' and 'it can be show' instead of 'it can be shown'. Additionally, the phrase 'men are high but it is decreased' is grammatically awkward. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.

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