Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this diagram reflects that the men of age 15 to 24 do more activity as compared to woman in the age of 15 to 24.

In the other hand thein the age of 25 to 34 men gradually does less activity than the women in this age

in the other case the man in the age of 35 to 44 can slightly decrease the activity nevertheless the women activity are rapidly increase .

In next diagram illustrate that the man work are slighly increase but the women work are also increase little bit in the age of 45 to 54.

the next diagram show that in the age of 66 to 64 the man activity can increase a little bit .and the the woman activity seems similar as like previous.

in the last diagram demonsrate that in the age of 65 or over both male and female can do similar activity.

this diagram reflect that women do more activity than man in the life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or effectively group the information. The description is fragmented, focusing on individual age groups without identifying the main trends or making meaningful comparisons. The final summary statement, 'women do more activity than man in the life', is an overgeneralization not supported by the data provided. Key features, such as the peak participation rates or the specific gender gaps, are not highlighted. To improve, you should group the data logically and ensure that the main trends are clearly identified in an introductory overview.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks logical organization. It is written as a series of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive report. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often misused, such as 'In the other hand' and 'In next diagram'. Paragraphing is absent, which makes the text difficult to follow. There is no clear progression of ideas; instead, the writer jumps between age groups without a structured approach. To improve, use linking words to connect ideas and organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Words like 'activity', 'increase', and 'diagram' are used repeatedly throughout the text. There are also errors in word choice and form, such as 'woman' instead of 'women' and 'man' instead of 'men'. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'the man work are slighly increase'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise terms to describe trends, such as 'participation rates', 'fluctuated', or 'remained consistent'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'men gradually does less') and pluralization (e.g., 'the man work'). Sentence structures are simple and often lack correct punctuation. The use of articles is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex structures.

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