Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart demonstrated the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall, men and women in different age groups engaged in regular physical activity. the 15-24 age group was standing highest level in men, and 35-44 age had recorded lowest level. However, 45-54 and 55-64 age group was representing highest in men.
At the beginning of 2010, the 15–24 age group had the highest level of physical activity at 52.8% in men, while women were accounting for 47.7%. In 25 to 34 age group was standing almost 42.2% in men and women making up 48.9%. In addition, the 35 to 44 age categories had stood up lowest level at 39.5% in male, although female was making up approximately 52.5%.
Furthermore, the 45-54 and 55-64 age group had both highest level of physical activity almost 53% to 53.3% female almost and male around 43.1% to 45.1%. However, 65 and over had stooded constant percentage between men and women around 46.7% to 47.1%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the age groups and gender comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the statement that the 15-24 age group was the 'highest level in men' is contradicted by the later claim that the 45-54 and 55-64 groups were the highest. The overview is also slightly confusing due to these inaccuracies. While you have selected relevant data points, the lack of clarity in the summary and the contradictory statements prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that your overview accurately reflects the data trends and that your supporting details are logically consistent with your summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'At the beginning of 2010' are used inappropriately, as the chart shows data for a single year rather than a timeline. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, such as 'In 25 to 34 age group was standing almost 42.2% in men', which lacks a clear subject. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each sentence has a clear subject and verb to maintain logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. You rely on repetitive phrasing such as 'highest level' and 'making up'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'stooded constant percentage' (should be 'remained constant') and 'had stood up lowest level'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of word-choice errors limit the score. Try to vary your verbs and use more precise terminology for describing statistical data, such as 'peaked at', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect verb tenses and forms (e.g., 'had stooded', 'was representing'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'the 15-24 age group was standing highest level in men'). While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors is significant. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice when describing data, as this will help you produce more accurate and professional-sounding sentences.
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