Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The data illustrates the proportion of Australian residents having variety of age combinations connected to their routine physical work in 2010.
Overall, three age groups of Australian women are involed in their daily physical activity while only one male group is near to meet daily activities as women.
Australian women having age groups from 35 to 64 makes record daily activities than other age groups in 2010. The one age group ,from 45 to 54, shows maximum work capabilities in all female groups. The female age group , from 35 to 44, has lowest proportion in all that is 39.5.
On the other hand, Male having age from 15 to 24
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the task achievement score. Because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to provide a full overview or report on the data provided in the chart. Key features are not fully identified, and comparisons are largely absent due to the unfinished nature of the writing. To improve, you must ensure you complete the summary of all data points and provide a clear, comprehensive overview that covers both genders and all age groups presented in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts to use paragraphing, but the structure is fragmented. The introduction is unclear, and the body paragraphs are not fully developed. Cohesive devices are minimal, and the abrupt ending makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of the information. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and use linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') to connect your ideas more smoothly. The current lack of completion prevents a coherent flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'having variety of age combinations' and 'shows maximum work capabilities' are unnatural and imprecise in this context. There is a lack of academic vocabulary required for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing charts and graphs, and try to use a wider range of synonyms to avoid repeating basic words like 'groups' or 'activities'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('the' is often missing), subject-verb agreement ('groups... makes'), and awkward phrasing ('near to meet daily activities'). The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity expected at higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and article usage.
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