Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the assigned bar graph delineates information regarding that the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups. the data has been calibrated in percentage.
overall, It s evident that the firstly male percentage is very high but some time male percentage is decrease. female percentage is increase in regular physical activity.
In 2010, male percentage is high at point of 50.8. female are decline in physical activity at age 15 to 24. however, age of 25 to 34 female are steadily increase in physical activity and male are decline. In this time female are increase in physical activity. and male are decline.
In age of 45 to 54 male are decrease in physical activity and female are increase at point of 53.3. and last second female percentage is total 53 and male 45.1. 65 and over male and female are same point but male are decrease in 46.7 and female are 47.1.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles to present a clear overview. While it identifies some trends, the description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate. For instance, the statement that 'male percentage is very high but some time male percentage is decrease' is vague and lacks the precision required for Task 1. The report fails to highlight the most significant features or provide a meaningful comparison between the genders across the age groups. The data points mentioned are often difficult to follow, and the lack of a clear, logical structure makes it challenging for the reader to grasp the main trends presented in the bar chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'male are decline', 'female are increase'). There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, making the information feel like a list of disconnected observations rather than a coherent summary. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between different age groups is abrupt. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping similar trends together rather than jumping between genders and age groups randomly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic verbs like 'increase' and 'decrease' and often use them incorrectly in terms of grammar (e.g., 'female are increase'). There is a lack of variety in describing trends, such as using words like 'fluctuate,' 'peak,' or 'remain stable.' Furthermore, the phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'at point of 50.8' or 'last second female percentage.' To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data interpretation and ensure that your word choices are grammatically appropriate for the context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'female are decline' instead of 'female participation declined') and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple and repetitive, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many sentences starting with lowercase letters. The errors are pervasive and often make the meaning of your sentences unclear. Focusing on basic sentence construction, specifically the correct use of verbs and prepositions, will be essential for improving your score in this area.
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