Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates the proportion of aduls from Australia did the everyday body workout of multiples aged during 2010.
Overall, the middle aged peoples did the most substantial physical activity in the whole chart. While, the noticeable group of doing the less is recorded in 39.5 percent.
In the long activity of 15-24 to 35-44 years old males point was decreased fluctuantly by 13 percent reached 52.8 to lowest 39.5%. However, same aged of females experienced the exact contrast of males, where womens grows respectively by 5 percent of the chart to 52.5% from 47.7%.
Similarly, the next group of peoples age mentioning to 45-54 to the last of 65 and over. Whereas, the first stage of females fell slightly by a few proportion nearly 0.3% from age gap between 10
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the summary is incomplete; the description of the data is fragmented and stops abruptly in the final paragraph, leaving out key information from the chart. While there is an attempt to identify main features, the lack of completion and the failure to reach the required length mean the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the chart are described and that you provide a full, cohesive summary that meets the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used ineffectively; for example, the phrase 'While, the noticeable group' is grammatically incorrect and does not serve as a proper transition. The final paragraph is incomplete, which breaks the flow of the text entirely. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure that your ideas are linked logically using appropriate transition words like 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'consequently'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'everyday body workout' and 'middle aged peoples' are unnatural and do not reflect the academic tone required for Task 1. There is also confusion in word choice, such as 'long activity' and 'exact contrast'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data precisely. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant proportion', 'a steady increase', or 'a downward trend', and avoid informal or non-standard phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('womens grows'), incorrect word forms ('aduls', 'peoples'), and awkward sentence structures that make the meaning unclear. The use of complex sentences is attempted but often results in errors, such as 'the first stage of females fell slightly by a few proportion'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones. Pay close attention to pluralization, verb tenses, and the correct use of articles.
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