Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the graph below shows a different types of ages of male and female doing physical activity.

overall the given data shows the percentage of male and female doing physical activity in 2010.

In 2010 the female from 15 to 65 and over there physical activity ratio was : from 15 to 24 the ratio were 52.8%,then from 25 to 34 the ratio drops to 42.2%,And from 35 to 44 the ratio even drops more than 39.5%., from 45 to 54 the ratio slightly increase to 43.1%,And from 55 to 64 it increase even more to 45.1%,And in last from 65 and over the ratio slightly increase up to 47.1.

similarly, In male the physical activity ratio from 15 to 65 and over was that ; that from 15 to 24 the ratio was 47.7%,from 25 to 34 the ratio drops to 42.2%,And from 35 to 44 the ratio drops even more to 39.5%, from 45 to 54 the ratio increase to 43.1%,from 55 to 64 the ratio increase even more to 45.1%,and from 65 to over the ratio goes slightly upper to 46.7%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, but it lacks a clear overview of the trends. While you have listed the percentages for each age group, the report is essentially a list of figures rather than a summary. To achieve a higher band, you should group the data to highlight key trends, such as the general decline in physical activity until middle age followed by a recovery in older groups. Additionally, the introduction is slightly repetitive and could be more concise. Ensure you provide a clear, analytical summary of the overall trends rather than just transcribing the data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the flow is mechanical and repetitive. You rely heavily on repetitive sentence structures such as 'the ratio was' and 'the ratio drops'. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of semicolons and commas. To improve, try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, and ensure that your paragraphing serves to group related information logically rather than just separating the two genders.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'ratio' to describe percentages, which is not the most accurate term in this context; 'percentage' or 'proportion' would be better. There is also a lack of variety in the verbs used to describe trends, such as 'drops' and 'increase'. To improve, incorporate more precise vocabulary to describe data, such as 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'remained stable', or 'peaked'. The current range is adequate for basic communication but lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the ratio were' instead of 'the ratio was') and article usage. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, as most sentences follow a simple, repetitive pattern. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary commas and incorrect use of semicolons. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb tense consistency. Incorporating more complex structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, would also help improve your score.

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