Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates workout done by various age group of male as well as female citizens of Australia during the year of 2010.

Overall, it is evident that women were more active in physical activity rather than men in the age group of 25 to 64. While elder generation both male and female are equal in terms of percentage. Younger male population slightly more than female.

The age group of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 have same percentage at 53% of female audience who did workout whereas in that age group male population were far less than women.In the older generation both male and female done same percentage of physical workout about 47%.

In other hand, younger generation age of 15 to 24 boys were more active in fitness at around 52.8%, whereas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. While you have attempted to identify some main features, such as the trends in the 45-64 age groups, the lack of completion means you have not fully reported on all data categories provided in the chart. To improve, ensure you cover all age groups mentioned in the prompt and provide a complete summary that includes a clear overview and supporting data for all segments. The current under-length and unfinished nature of the report prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response shows some attempt at logical organization by grouping information into paragraphs. However, the abrupt ending and the lack of a concluding summary disrupt the flow of information. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'In other hand' (which should be 'On the other hand'), but they are somewhat mechanical. The progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect your comparisons more fluidly throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'did workout' and 'physical activity'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'female audience' when referring to data points in a chart. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'participation rates', or 'figures'. Additionally, ensure you use accurate terminology for the groups described, such as 'demographic' or 'age bracket' instead of 'audience'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have frequent grammatical errors, such as 'workout done by' (should be 'physical activity undertaken by'), 'elder generation both male and female are equal' (subject-verb agreement), and 'In other hand'. The sentence structure is often repetitive. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and using more varied sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or participial phrases to combine information. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions will also help improve your score.

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