Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. And as a first impression, the percentage in all age group's is above almost the 40%. IN the age of 15 to 24, male gender is considerably more involved in regular physical activity, but it's not the same case for the rest of the study. From the age of 25 to 65 and over, woman are above man in the comparison, and they're more involved in the age between 35 to 64 where we can find a difference of 10% on average. So man are more attend to practice sport at their youth, and more they grow more they got no time to do so, they would be more focusing on their career and job. Not for the woman, who keeps the percentage in average of 50%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the age group trends and the gender comparison. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. The student attempts to explain the reasons for the trends (e.g., 'focusing on their career and job'), which is not required in an Academic Task 1 report and detracts from the objective summary of the data. Furthermore, the data reporting is imprecise; for example, stating 'above almost the 40%' is vague. To reach a higher band, the response should focus strictly on reporting the data provided in the chart without speculation, ensuring that specific figures are cited accurately to support the comparisons made.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt at logical flow, the lack of paragraphing and the limited use of cohesive devices (e.g., 'So', 'And as a first impression') make the structure feel mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'not the same case for the rest of the study', which is ambiguous. To improve, the student should use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction/overview from the detailed body analysis and employ a wider range of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'male gender is considerably more involved' (should be 'men are more involved') and 'man are more attend to practice sport' (should be 'men are more inclined to practice sport'). The vocabulary is repetitive, and the student struggles with basic terminology related to data description. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends and comparisons would significantly improve the quality of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('man are more attend', 'woman are above man'), pluralization ('all age group's'), and sentence structure. The use of complex sentences is limited and often contains errors, such as 'more they grow more they got no time'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent subject-verb agreement and correct article usage would be a beneficial starting point for improvement.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.