Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This bar chart is explaining the percentage of Australian men and women in various ages group who did regularly physics in 2010. And also, this chart is illustrating the main quality and, make competitive whos where relevant.
Overall, the highest percentage in Australia while doing activity in 2010, the ages of 15 to 24 group was the peak doing regularly physical activity at 52.8 rather than age groups.
The female age group of 15 to 24 often activity is 47.7 percentage.
And the another teenager's 25 to 34 age groups keeping activity in 2010 is 42.2 and comparison the female ages group 25 to 34 with adults ages, her groups was above 48.9 doing exercise in 2010.
The 35 to 44 male age groups, the regularly doing physical activity was extremely decreased on 39.5 rather than all ages group in 2010. And also female were 52.5.
The all another ages group male and female such as, 45 to 54, 55 to 64 and, over the ages 64 doing physical activity were totally different 53.3, 43.1, 53 and last percentage was 47.1.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, mentioning specific age groups and percentages such as the 15 to 24 age group at 52.8 and the female group at 47.7. However, the data reporting is often inaccurate, confused, and disjointed (for instance, the text struggles to clearly contrast male and female trends across the categories and misinterprets several figure values). The overview in the second paragraph is poorly formulated and does not clearly synthesise the most salient trends. Key comparisons are attempted but poorly executed, leading to a response that only partially satisfies the requirements of Task 1. This performance aligns best with Band 4.5 to 5, and is rounded to Band 5.0 due to limited and underdeveloped reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is heavily compromised by erratic paragraphing and a lack of logical progression. The introduction consists of two confusing opening sentences, and the body of the text collapses into a series of disconnected, single-sentence paragraphs that fail to guide the reader through the data smoothly. Cohesive devices are either missing, repetitive, or mechanically forced (e.g., 'And also', 'And the another teenager's'), and referencing is frequently ambiguous, making it difficult to determine which gender or age bracket is being referred to. Overall arrangement lacks a coherent structure, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often unnatural (e.g., 'did regularly physics', 'often activity is 47.7 percentage'). There are frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, such as 'keeping activity' and 'adults ages, her groups'. The range of vocabulary is strictly limited to elementary terms related to the prompt, and attempts to use more complex terminology fail due to incorrect forms and inappropriate usage. These persistent inaccuracies and limited control place the lexical resource squarely within the Band 4.0 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains a very limited range of structures, with almost no accurate complex sentences. Frequent structural errors occur, including fragments ('The female age group of 15 to 24 often activity is 47.7 percentage'), missing verbs, faulty predication ('This bar chart is explaining...'), and severe issues with prepositions and tense consistency. Errors are extremely frequent and frequently impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning, matching the standard described for Band 4.0.
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