Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in different age group who are doing daily physical activity in 2010.
Overall, Australian women are more active as compared to men. Resident of age group 15 to 24 are most active age group. Whilst, resident of age group 25 to 34 were less active in daily exercise as compared to other age group.
Firstly, for the age group of 15 to 24, 52.8% of male resident of australia are doing regular exercise whilest 47.7% of women of same age group are
For the age group 25 to 34, 42.2% of male and 48.9% of women of Australia are doing regular exercise. Similar for the age group 35 to 44, 39.5% and 52.5% of men and women of Australia respectively are actively doing daily exercise. Men and women of age group 45 to 54 who do regular exercise was 43.1% and 53.3% respectively. For age group 55 to 64, 45.1% of men and 53% of women were actively participating in regular exercise. For age group 65 and over, 46.7% of men and 47,1% of women were participating in daily exercise.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the bar chart, accurately reporting data for various age groups and making overall comparisons, such as noting that women are generally more active than men. However, there are some minor factual inaccuracies and unsupported generalizations in the overview; for instance, the text claims that residents aged 15 to 24 are the most active overall and that 25 to 34 are the least active, whereas the chart shows peak activity in other groups depending on gender. Additionally, the final sentence cuts off mid-thought ("are"). Despite these minor flaws, the task is adequately addressed, placing it at band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical structure, moving from an introductory overview to detailed body paragraphs. Paragraphing is attempted, though the second body paragraph is overly dense and lists data point by point without sufficient synthesis. Cohesive devices such as "Firstly", "Whilst", and "Similarly" are used, but referencing is sometimes mechanical or imprecise (e.g., repeating "of Australia are doing regular exercise"). Progression is evident, but the lack of smooth transitions between the heavy list of statistics keeps this criterion at a band 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms like "proportion", "regular physical activity", and "actively participating". However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as "Resident of age group" instead of "Residents in the age group", and incomplete phrasing. Less common lexical items are attempted but occasionally lack precision. Spelling is generally acceptable, but lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to a band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and comparative structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues ("Resident of age group 15 to 24 are", "was 43.1% and 53.3% respectively" with a plural subject), missing articles, and an incomplete sentence ending in "are". Punctuation errors also appear, such as a comma instead of a decimal point in "47,1%". These errors cause occasional strain for the reader, leading to a band 5.0.
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