Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In australian generation most of man do physical activity than woman at the age of 15 to 24 because

at that age man have the high level of testestorone

An at age of 25 woman have very awfull deseaes than man and woman do more workout or physical activity than man.

At the age 35 to 54 man have less ratio than woman because woman never quit or never lose hope about physical or work out

at the age of 65 to 67 the people of australian both woman and man rest tere lives because the fitness of years can save there lives and improve there live style and live there better version of life that no body can live there life easy and at this age some people bone also weak and sour ness hard one bad move can injury them self they both years physical activity equal its can not be any injury

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarise information from the chart, but it fails to accurately report the main features and trends, introducing a significant amount of speculative, outside medical or biological information not found in the chart, such as 'high level of testestorone' and 'woman have very awfull deseaes'. While some comparisons are attempted across age groups, the misinterpretation of data and heavy reliance on irrelevant speculation mean the task is only partially addressed. The description of data points is frequently inaccurate or vague, leading to an underdeveloped response that misses key comparative insights.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks clear paragraph structure, presenting a series of short, disjointed sentences and fragments. There is a distinct lack of appropriate cohesive devices to guide the reader through the data, and transitions between sentences are abrupt and confusing. Referencing is often unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'they' and 'their', making it difficult to determine whether the writer is referring to men, women, or age groups. Overall organisation does not demonstrate a clear logical progression, significantly hindering the readability of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and severely limited in range. The response contains numerous severe spelling errors such as 'australian' (uncapitalised), 'deseaeas' (diseases), 'testestorone' (testosterone), 'teree' (their), and 'injury' instead of injure. Word choices are frequently unnatural or inappropriate for an academic task, such as 'rest tere lives' or 'sour ness'. These lexical errors and limitations repeatedly strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical structures are extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences and failed attempts at complex clauses. There are pervasive errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, such as missing terminal punctuation and run-on sentences like 'at this age some people bone also weak and sour ness hard one bad move can injury them self they both years physical activity equal its can not be any injury'. These frequent errors severely distort meaning and cause continuous difficulty for the reader.

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