Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart below illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups who did daily physical activity in 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of female in physical activity experienced upward trend in many age groups as compared to men who had low proportion in 2010.
From 15 to 24, the percentage of women was higher in physical activity approximately 52.8% while the men had 47.7%. By the age group of 25 to 34, female had high percentage 48.8% in regular physical activity while the men had 42.2%. Furthermore, the ratio of physical activity was grater in women 52.2% while the men had 39.9%.
From 45 to 54, Female experienced rose 53.3% and again men fell to 43.3%. In the end, the age group o
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the bar chart, providing data points for various age groups such as 'From 15 to 24, the percentage of women was higher in physical activity approximately 52.8%'. However, there are several limitations. Firstly, the student has completely failed to complete the response, cutting off mid-sentence at 'In the end, the age group o', leading to an incomplete overview and missing data for older cohorts. Furthermore, the length requirement is NOT met, as the response contains only 131 words, falling short of the 150-word minimum. Because of the incomplete task completion and under-length penalty, Task Achievement cannot exceed Band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text attempts a basic overarching structure with an introduction and body paragraphs detailing age brackets. However, the organisation is severely disrupted by the abrupt truncation at the end of the text. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and repetitively, such as 'while the men had' and 'Furthermore'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and paragraphing is underdeveloped due to the missing conclusion. Despite these flaws, the progression is somewhat visible in the earlier sections, allowing for a Band 5.0 rating for structural attempt.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'percentage of women', 'physical activity', and 'men had'. There are notable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'female in physical activity experienced upward trend' (missing articles and unnatural phrasing) and 'grater' (spelling error for 'greater'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary, but inaccurate usage and limited range restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in article usage, missing prepositions, and faulty verb forms, such as 'the percentage of female in physical activity experienced upward trend' and 'Female experienced rose 53.3%'. Punctuation is generally present, but the abrupt ending of the text leaves an incomplete sentence structure. Errors frequently cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning the grammar with Band 5.0.
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