Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the porportion of both men and women from age period of 24 to over 65 in Australia , who hit gym on regular bases in year 2010.
It is noticeable that in men workout is more popular when they are between the age of 15 and 24 , with the percentage of 52.8 while in women the age period of 45 to 55 shows the highest percentage of regular exercises in year 2010.
To begin with, the rate of daily exercise in men rise to 52.8% in the age of 15 to 24 and shows sudden decline of almost 10% in their mid twienties to eary thirties. It can be clearly seen the percentage drops more in mid thirties but starts to graduallyrise from the age of 45 to onwards.
Moreover, the females of Australia in year 2010 has almost identical percentage of regular physical activites from the age of 15 to 24 and from the age of 65 and over (47.7% and 47.1%) respectively. Furthermore the number increases gradually from mid thirties to mid sixties in women. However from mid sixties to onward the percentage decreases rapidly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the bar chart well, presenting a clear overview and reporting key data points for both Australian men and women across different age groups in 2010. The student successfully identifies peak participation rates, such as 52.8% for young men aged 15-24, and makes relevant comparisons between genders. However, there are minor inaccuracies in the interpretation of the age ranges mentioned in the introduction (stating 'from age period of 24 to over 65' whereas the chart starts at 15) and some minor omissions regarding intermediate data. Overall, the task is addressed competently, satisfying the requirements for a Band 6.5 or solid Band 6, leaning toward Band 6.0 due to some slight imprecisions in reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently with a logical overall progression. Paragraphing is utilised to separate the introduction, general trends, and specific gender breakdowns. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore', although some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive ('Furthermore the number increases...'). Referencing is generally clear, though occasional mechanical links affect the natural flow of ideas. Paragraphing is sufficient and appropriate for a short analytical report. This performance aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'proportion', 'participation', and 'sudden decline'. However, there are notable spelling errors ('porportion', 'twienties', 'eary', 'activites') and awkward phrasing such as 'who hit gym on regular bases' and 'in men workout is more popular'. These lexical errors and slip-ups occasionally distract the reader, though they do not impede overall communication. The vocabulary control is characteristic of a Band 5.5 to 6.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including relative clauses and comparative structures. However, there are frequent grammatical inaccuracies, missing articles, and punctuation errors, such as missing commas or placing spaces before commas (e.g., 'Australia , who hit gym'). Examples like 'the rate of daily exercise in men rise to' (subject-verb agreement) and 'from the age of 45 to onwards' demonstrate persistent errors in grammar and prepositions. While meaning is generally recoverable, the frequency of errors places this firmly in the Band 5.0 range.
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