Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given chart illustrates the proportion of men and women in different age groups who did physical activity regularly in Australia in 2010.

Overall, women had higher participation rates than men in all age groups except 15–24. Women recorded their highest figure among 45–54-year-olds, while the rates for both genders were almost the same in the 65-and-over group.

It was seen that from the age of 15 to 24, 52.8% of males did physical activity but females were fewer 47.7%. In contrast to, 25 to 34 age group the proportion of women who did physical work increased to 48.9% but the average of males declined to 42.2%.

For three different age groups of males and females from 35 to 64, the proportion of women who did physical exercise steadily grew to more than 52% and the percentage of males were 39.5%, 43.1% and 45.1%. Furthermore, in the age group of 65 and over the proportions of males and females who did physical tasks were almost the same 46.7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The student covers all parts of the task well, providing an accurate overview and selecting key features from the chart. Main trends are identified, such as women generally having higher participation rates except in the 15-24 age bracket, and comparisons are made effectively. For instance, the student notes that 'women recorded their highest figure among 45–54-year-olds' and correctly contrasts the younger age group figures (52.8% for males versus 47.7% for females). The data reported matches the visual source accurately, with only minor awkwardness in expressing specific figures. Overall, the task is successfully and thoroughly addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organised with a clear overall progression. An introductory sentence is followed by an effective overview paragraph, which is then supported by detailed body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'In contrast to', and 'Furthermore'. However, there are some minor mechanical cohesive issues and slightly awkward transitions, such as 'In contrast to, 25 to 34 age group', which affect the natural flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information, ensuring the structure remains clear throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate and generally appropriate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully employing terms such as 'proportion', 'participation rates', and 'decline'. However, there are some awkward word choices and phrasing errors, such as 'did physical work' and 'did physical tasks' instead of 'engaged in physical activity', as well as missing prepositions or incorrect word forms in sentences like 'females were fewer 47.7%'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success, though the meaning remains clear throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over multi-clause structures ('while the rates for both genders were almost the same...'). However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, such as 'In contrast to, 25 to 34 age group the proportion... increased', 'females were fewer 47.7%', and 'the percentage of males were 39.5%', where subject-verb agreement and preposition use are faulty. While these errors do not severely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score.

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