Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The column diagrams illustrates the individuals doing day to day physical activity for Australia.
Overall, in year 2010 age group between 45 to 54 female have occupied the top position whereas, 65 and over occupied the least position on the other hand, in male the greatest was between 15 to 24 age group while 35 to 44 has shown the least.
To begin with, the individuals with 15 to 24 the males have shown the highest percentage among all that is 52.8% and female were on 47.7%. Marking substantial decline in male to 42.2% and female rose slightly to 48.9% for 25 to 34 age group however, the between 35 to 44 has remained least significant contributor for both male and female that is 39.5% and 52.5%.
Turning to the rest figures, between 45 to 54 the female have secured the top position among all that is 53.3% while male have shown average 43.1% while between 55 to 65 female have shown slight decline to 53% where male has shown slight surge to 45.1%. Lastly, between 65 and above female has drastically decrease to 47.1% whereas, male has increased to 46.7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by summarising the main features of the bar chart regarding Australian men and women's physical activity in 2010. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting and comprehension. For instance, the student states that for males the greatest was between 15 to 24 age group while 35 to 44 has shown the least, and incorrectly states that for females the 35 to 44 group is the least significant contributor (when it is actually 52.5%, the highest female group alongside 45-54 at 53.3%). Furthermore, data points such as the 55 to 64 group are misstated as 55 to 65. The overview attempts to capture extremes but is somewhat confused in its execution. This performance aligns best with Band 5 due to partial task coverage and noticeable data misinterpretations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into four paragraphs, including a brief introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by clumsy transitions and confusing referencing, such as 'the between 35 to 44 has remained least significant' and 'Turning to the rest figures'. Cohesive devices are sometimes awkward or inaccurate, and referencing within and between sentences is occasionally unclear. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion lacks smooth flow. This corresponds to a Band 5 descriptor, where some organisation is evident, but overall progression and cohesive management are faulty and mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, featuring frequent reliance on terms such as 'percentage', 'group', 'male', and 'female'. There are noticeable lexical and collocational errors, such as 'The column diagrams illustrates', 'least position', 'rest figures', and 'drastically decrease' instead of 'decreased'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success and accuracy. While communication is not entirely impeded, the restricted range and persistent word-choice inaccuracies place this response firmly in the Band 5 category for Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex constructions contain grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'in year 2010 age group between 45 to 54 female have occupied the top position' and 'female have secured the top position... while male have shown average 43.1%'. Subject-verb agreement errors are frequent (e.g., 'female have', 'male has shown'), and punctuation is occasionally weak. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited control over grammar and sentence patterns, fitting the Band 5 descriptors.
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