Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graphical representation demonstrates the information related to the percentage of men and women in various age groups who do physical exercise in their daily routine in 2010.

Overall, it is witnessed that womens above 25 were more engaged into exercise as compared to males. however, boys of age group 15 to 24 were more engaged into physical activities.

From 15 to 24, 52.8% of boys and 47.7% of girls were engaged in physical activities. however, exercise among males from age group 25 to 34 drops and just 42.2% males do exercise. moreover, 48.9% womens do exercise during this age group. from 35 to 44 , 39.5% men were into exercise daily and 52.2% womens were engaged in physical activities. furthermore,43.1 males and 53.3% females do exercise daily. from 55-64 age group, the number for women remain approximately same as 45 to 54 and 45.1% males do physical activities during this age interval. those who were above 65 there number remain same and both 47% male and female were engaged in physical activities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the chart and making relevant comparisons between genders and age groups. An overview is present, noting the general trend that women over 25 were more engaged in exercise compared to males, except in the youngest age bracket. The figures cited generally match the visual data accurately, such as noting 52.8% for boys and 47.7% for girls in the 15-24 age group. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and omissions in data reporting for later age brackets, and the overview could be more fully developed. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, placing it firmly at a band 6.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to organise information logically into an introduction, an overview, and body details. However, paragraphing is poorly handled, with the entire body of data crammed into a single, dense paragraph. Furthermore, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or missing entirely, and sentence-to-sentence transitions are weak (e.g., lowercase 'however' and 'moreover' starting clauses incorrectly). Referencing is occasionally unclear. Because the structural layout lacks clear paragraphing and cohesive control is faulty, this criterion corresponds to a band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic data points effectively ('percentage', 'engaged', 'physical activities'). However, there is a lack of variety and several word-formation and grammatical-category errors, such as using 'womens' instead of 'women', 'males' used as a noun incorrectly without a head noun in some places ('43.1 males'), and repetitive phrasing ('do exercise'). Less common lexical items are attempted but often inaccurate or unnatural. These limitations place lexical resource at a band 5.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent punctuation errors, such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and after full stops, and missing commas. Grammatical inaccuracies are common, including subject-verb agreement errors ('the number for women remain', 'there number remain same') and missing words ('43.1 [percent of] males'). While communication is generally maintained despite these errors, the high frequency of basic mistakes prevents the score from reaching a higher band, resulting in a 5.0.

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