Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided bar chart indicates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in the year of 2010.
To begin with, people of the age 15 to 25 years old, men were more active than female in regular physical activities around 52.8% male perform physical activities; which was highest among any-other age group. Similarly above female around 47.7% female were active; which was second lowest for female. Moreover, percentage in male were keep diclines for 25 to 34 and 35 to 44. However, percentage in female were rised in that age group.
Furthermore, percentage of female remain almost similar in between 52-53.3 in the age groups 35 to 64 respectively. However, percentage of male were increced by almost 5.6% in that perticular given age-groups. In addition, in the age-group 65 and above male and female were almost same active in the year 2010.
To sum up, we can say female were more active than men in larger extent. In contrast, young men were more active than women.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting several key data points and trends from the bar chart, such as the highest activity rate among 15-to-24-year-old males and the general patterns across different age groups. However, the response suffers from several inaccurate data interpretations and awkward phrasing regarding the figures. For instance, the statement that women's percentages 'remain almost similar in between 52-53.3 in the age groups 35 to 64 respectively' misreads the data for the 55-64 age group where female activity drops to 53%, but more importantly mischaracterizes the male trend, which actually rises across those brackets. While the main features are partially covered, the lack of precision and some confusing comparisons limit the task response to a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into four paragraphs, including an introduction and a brief conclusion, which provides a basic overall structure. However, the logical progression within the body paragraphs is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence connections. Phrases like 'To begin with' and 'Moreover, percentage in male were keep diclines' are grammatically flawed and fail to guide the reader smoothly through the data comparisons. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow which age groups or genders are being contrasted. Overall cohesion is mechanical and inadequate in places, aligning with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples include 'diclines' instead of declines, 'rised' instead of rose, 'increced' instead of increased, and 'perticular' instead of particular. The student attempts some descriptive vocabulary related to data trends, but these attempts are marred by inaccurate forms and lack of flexibility. There is little evidence of less common lexical items used with precision or appropriate collocation, which places this performance firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are almost uniformly faulty. There are persistent, highly noticeable errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'men were more active than female', 'percentage in male were keep diclines', and 'male and female were almost same active'. Punctuation is also problematic, including misused semicolons and run-on structures. Because errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader in parsing the intended meaning, the grammatical performance corresponds to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on standard scoring practices.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.