Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar ghrap illustrats the proportion of men and women doing regular activity in Australia in 2010.
Overall, the female accounted most dominant and greater than male throughout the period, most share notice in the age of 35 to 44, and lower number of percentage recorded in 65 and over. Wherease in the age of 15 to 24 female number of percentage was higher.
Looking at the details,in the younger age female and male was accounted at 47.7 and 52.8. The second number was 35 to 44 male proportion was 39.5 and female at 52.5. Followed by 65 and over male was 46.7 and female was 47.1. In the age of 25 to 35 male was42.2 and female was 48.9. The second last was 55 to 64 age of men and women share the male was 45.1 and female was 53. And finally the noticeable age group male was43.1 and female was 53.3.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to cover the main features of the chart, providing an overview and referencing various age groups. However, the overview is confused and poorly articulated ('female accounted most dominant and greater than male throughout the period'). Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in reporting specific data points; for instance, the text states that for the 15 to 24 age group, 'female and male was accounted at 47.7 and 52.8', but the chart shows 52.8 for males and 47.7 for females. The data is presented as a disjointed list rather than a coherent summary with well-selected comparisons. This corresponds to Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into three short paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and a details paragraph. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow due to poor logical sequencing and abrupt transitions between data points. Cohesive devices are minimal or inaccurate ('Wherease', 'The second number was'). The listing of data in the final paragraph lacks a clear organizing principle, jumping randomly across age groups and categories. Paragraphing is attempted but remains weak. This fits the Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('proportion', 'number', 'percentage', 'age group'). There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors ('ghrap' for graph, 'illustrats', 'accounted most dominant', 'Wherease'). The student attempts to use some less common phrasing, but inaccurate collocations and lexical errors ('lower number of percentage recorded') restrict the clarity of the message. This demonstrates the characteristics of Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts some complex structures, but these are frequently faulty or ungrammatical (e.g., 'most share notice in the age of 35 to 44', 'female number of percentage was higher'). There is a lack of control over subject-verb agreement and prepositional use ('in the age of'). Simple sentences often contain basic errors, and punctuation is occasionally neglected. While meaning can sometimes be extracted, frequent grammatical errors cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 5.
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