Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart shows men and women percentage of australian in different age group doing regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall, 15 to 24 age group recorded the highest figure, while 65 and over had the lowest.it is also noticable that male and women was almost equal percentage between 40 to 50.
The group of female on age of 35 to 64 had the simillar categories. Looking first at the male, it recorded highest figure on 15 to 24 while showed 35 to 44 lowest. The percentage of male stadily between the 25 to 65 age groups.
The lowest percentage of female recorded on the age group of 65 and over. By comparison,female percentage more than male before the age of 65.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response is under-length at 122 words, falling short of the 150-word minimum, which places a ceiling on Task Achievement. While the student attempts to provide an overview and highlights some key features—such as the 15 to 24 age group recording the highest figure and 65 and over the lowest overall—the data reporting is imprecise and contains several factual inaccuracies. For instance, the statement that 'male and women was almost equal percentage between 40 to 50' is confusing and misinterprets the chart, and other trends are described vaguely without accurate support from the visual data. Key comparisons between genders are only partially developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into four very short paragraphs, though the logical structure is hindered by abrupt transitions and underdeveloped sentences. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inappropriately, such as 'Looking first at the male' followed by fragmented descriptions. The progression of ideas lacks smooth connectivity, and referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between genders seamlessly. Overall arrangement shows some organizational awareness, but the execution remains basic and mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The lexical range is limited and adequate only for basic communication. The student demonstrates some vocabulary related to the chart, such as 'percentage', 'age group', and 'regular physical activity', but relies heavily on simple and repetitive terms. There are notable word choice and phrasing errors, including 'men and women percentage of australian', 'simillar categories', and 'stadily', which stem from direct translation or poor collocation. Spelling mistakes and awkward grammatical forms restrict the precision required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing relies mostly on simple sentence structures, with few attempts at complex forms, and those attempts are frequently faulty—for example, 'it is also noticable that male and women was almost equal percentage between 40 to 50.' There are persistent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('male and women was'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions ('on age of 35 to 64'). These errors occur frequently and occasionally cause strain for the reader, though the general meaning remains partially decipherable.
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