Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart compares the proportion of men and women doing regular physical exercise activity of a particular country Australia in 2010.
Overall, the female age group were more active to do exercise daily, rather than male. However, men largest percentage showed on the young adults age group, while women contributed on middle-aged group.
In 2010, the age gap between 15-24 witnessed the largest proportion on male gender, accounted for 52.8%. Converesly, female stood at 47.7%. In 25-34 age group, male experienced a slight decrease by 42.2%, while female was approximetely 48.9%. Followed by people age 35-44, men again witnessed a decline trajectory, only at 39.5%, compare to female contributed growth by 52.5%.
Additionally, in the middle age bracket (45-54) male makesup a minimal increase to around 43.1%, however female peaked by 53.3% of regular physical activity. Moreover, age about 55-64 demonstrated a tiny rose on men gropu by 45.1% but in women accounted for 53%. At last age bracket of 65 and over, the both genders was amlost similar to each other figure at 46.7% of male and 47.15 of female.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate has attempted to summarise the main features of the chart, reporting specific data points such as 52.8% for males aged 15 to 24 and 53.3% for females aged 45 to 54. However, the overview provided in the second paragraph is somewhat unclear and contains sweeping generalisations, such as 'the female age group were more active to do exercise daily', which misinterprets the data as daily exercise rather than regular physical activity. Furthermore, there are minor inaccuracies in reporting certain age groups (e.g., misreading the 65 and over female figure as 47.15 instead of 47.1). While the key trends and comparisons are generally covered, the task response lacks the precision and fully developed overview expected at higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is structured into four paragraphs, including an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Progression is attempted through temporal and categorical sequencing, such as 'In 2010', 'In 25-34 age group', and 'Additionally'. However, referencing and cohesion are frequently mechanical or faulty, as seen in awkward transitions like 'Followed by people age 35-44' and 'At last age bracket'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion lacks smooth fluidity. Cohesive devices are sometimes used inaccurately, pulling down the overall effectiveness of the organisation.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'proportion', 'decline trajectory', and 'minimal increase'. However, there are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'exercise activity', 'active to do exercise', 'male gender' instead of 'males', and 'rose' used as a noun where 'rise' is required. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'Converesly' and 'approximetely'. These inaccuracies show a restricted control of lexical features, keeping the score at a modest level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and comparative structures. However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are numerous errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition use, such as 'men largest percentage showed on the young adults age group', 'male makesup a minimal increase', and 'age about 55-64 demonstrated a tiny rose on men gropu'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but frequent non-systematic structural errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the score from reaching a higher band.
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