Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of males and females across various age groups engaging in daily physical exercises in Australia in 2010. Overall, females exhibited higher participation rates than males in physical activities. Males aged 15-24 were the most active, while females in the 45-54 and 55-64 age groups showed the highest engagement in exercise.

Among males, those aged 15-24 had the highest participation rate at 52.8%, followed by individuals aged 65 or older at 46.7%. The 25-34, 45-54, and 55-64 age groups had relatively similar participation rates at 42.2%, 43.1%, and 45.1%, respectively. However, the 35-44 age group had a lower participation rate of 39.5%.

In contrast, females displayed a higher overall participation rate. The 45-54 age group led with 53.3%, closely followed by the 55-64 age group at 53%. The 25-34 and 35-44 age groups also showed significant participation levels, recording rates of 48.9% and 52.5%, respectively. The youngest and oldest female age groups had relatively lower participation rates, both around 47%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The student has successfully addressed all parts of the task by providing a clear summary and appropriate comparisons of the data. The overview effectively captures the general trend that females exhibited higher overall participation rates, while accurately noting the peak age groups for both genders. Key data points from the visual source, such as the highest male participation at 52.8% for the 15-24 age group and the female peak of 53.3% for the 45-54 age group, are cited correctly and accurately. The information is well-selected, logically organised, and fully satisfies the requirements of Academic Task 1 without any noticeable omissions or inaccuracies.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The response demonstrates a clear and logical progression throughout. Information is grouped sensibly into an introductory paragraph containing the overview, followed by dedicated paragraphs for male and female participation, which aids readability. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Among males', and 'In contrast' are used appropriately to guide the reader through the data comparisons. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and effectively. Referencing is clear and unambiguous throughout the text, ensuring that the relationships between ideas are easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The student employs a sufficient and appropriate range of vocabulary for this task, successfully using terms like 'proportion', 'participation rates', 'engagement', and 'respectively'. There is a nice attempt at less common phrasing such as 'closely followed by' and 'significantly participation levels'. However, there is a minor grammatical slip with 'significantly participation levels' instead of 'significant', which slightly affects word choice accuracy. Nevertheless, the vocabulary is varied enough to allow precise reporting of the data without impeding communication at any point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The response features a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures, demonstrating control over grammatical forms. Examples of complex structures include 'Males aged 15-24 were the most active, while females in the 45-54 and 55-64 age groups showed the highest engagement...' The majority of sentences are error-free, and punctuation is handled well. There are only very occasional minor errors, such as 'significantly participation' in the third paragraph, but these do not impede communication or detract from the overall clarity of the writing.

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