Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of regular physical activity done by Australian men and women of different ages in year 2010.
Overall, The Ratio of young males participated in regular physical activity was noted as the highest percentage of that time. The proportion of middle aged Females was almost equal to highest large ratio of men. Aged men and women took part in Regular physical activity with same percentage.
in 2010, young males contributed to regular physical activity with largest percentage of 52.8%, While young females ratio was 47.7%. The male of age 25 to 34 show fair participation of about 42% . On the other hand female participated more than males by leading percentage of 48.9%. The males of age 34 to 44 show less interest of ratio 39.5%, but females contributed by a large ratio of 52.5%.
The Males of the age 45-54 show a little participation of 43.1%, Whereas Female show higher contribution of 53.3% which is recorded as the second highest ratio in 2010. The male of age 55 to 64 participated in small amount, while female show a proportion of 53%. The people who were aged and more than 65 took part equally in regular physical activity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task and successfully reports the main features and comparisons. The student notes the highest figure overall (young males at 52.8%) and highlights key trends across age groups, such as the peak for females in the 45-54 age bracket (53.3%) and the convergence among the oldest cohort. However, the overview paragraph contains vague phrasing like 'highest large ratio of men' and 'same percentage' rather than clearly summarising the overarching trends. Data points are cited accurately from the chart, meeting the core requirements of Task Achievement at a Band 6.5 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a clear overall arrangement and is divided into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the data. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the other hand', 'While', and 'Whereas', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical. Referencing is occasionally slightly confusing, as seen in phrases like 'The male of age 25 to 34' where singular forms are used to describe a demographic group. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but overall progression could be smoother with more varied transitional phrases.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts at less common items such as 'proportion', 'participation', and 'contribution'. However, there are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'highest large ratio of men' and 'show a little participation'. Spelling and capitalization errors are also present, including random capitalization in the middle of sentences ('Overall, The Ratio...', 'in 2010...', 'Females'). The lexical range is sufficient to communicate the main data points, but errors in word formation and style place this at Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, using comparative clauses with 'while' and 'whereas'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement and singular/plural forms (e.g., 'The male of age 25 to 34 show...', 'young females ratio was...', 'Female show higher contribution'). Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent. While these errors do not completely impede communication, their frequency prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.
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