Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of regular physical activity done by Australian men and women of different ages in the year 2010.
Overall, the proportion of young males participating in regular physical activity was noted as the highest percentage of that time. The proportion of middle aged Females was almost equal to highest large ratio of men. Aged men and women took part in Regular physical activity with same percentage.
In 2010, young males contributed to regular physical activity with largest percentage of 52.8%, While young females ratio was 47.7%. The male of age 25 to 34 show fair participation of about 42% . On the other hand female participated more than males by leading percentage of 48.9%. The males of age 34 to 44 show less interest of ratio 39.5%, but females contributed by a large ratio of 52.5%.
The Males of the age 45-54 show a little participation of 43.1%, Whereas Female show higher contribution of 53.3% which is recorded as the second highest ratio in 2010. The male of age 55 to 64 participated in small amount, while female show a proportion of 53%. The people who were aged and more than 65 took part equally in regular physical activity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses the main features of the chart, reporting data for both genders across all age groups and making relevant comparisons. The overview captures key trends, such as the peak activity among young males and the general patterns across different age brackets. Figures such as 52.8% for young males and 53.3% for middle-aged females are correctly cited from the visual data. However, the overview could be more comprehensive by highlighting the overall contrast between male and female participation trends across age groups rather than just isolated points. Overall, the task is well covered, satisfying the requirements for a Band 6.5 or 7.0 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, moving to a brief overview, and detailing specific age groups in the body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'While', 'On the other hand', and 'Whereas' are used to connect ideas and contrast male and female participation. However, paragraphing and referencing are at times slightly mechanical or repetitive in structure (e.g., beginning multiple sentences with 'The male of age...'). Progression is clear overall, but transitions between sentences could be smoother to achieve a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, incorporating terms such as 'proportion', 'participation', 'contribution', and 'percentage'. There are some awkward collocations and imprecise word choices, such as 'young males contributed to regular physical activity with largest percentage' and 'The male of age 25 to 34 show fair participation'. Capitalization errors also occur inconsistently (e.g., 'Females', 'Males'). While less common vocabulary is attempted, recurring errors in word form and collocation keep this criterion at Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing subordinate clauses introduced by contrastive conjunctions. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly involving subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The male of age 25 to 34 show', 'Female show higher contribution', 'The male of age 55 to 64 participated... while female show') and missing articles ('the largest percentage'). Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent. These errors occasionally disrupt the flow of reading, aligning the response with Band 6.0 descriptors.
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