Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This bar chart illustrates the percentage of the Australian Women and men who did regular physicle activity in 2010, in different age group.

Overall, women did most of physicle activity than men in 2010.

At the start, men at the highest level which was 52.8 than the women which was 47.1 when the age of both between 15 to 24. But, when both reached at the od 25 to 34 then the percentage of men physicle activities went decrease which is 42.2 and women percentage increased and gain 48.9%. Moreover, at the age of 35 to 44, female was increasing drameticaly and reached to 52.5, although, men went to decreasing very sharply and reached at the value of 43.1.

However, when both of these reached at the age between 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, there was some slight decrease in women and small increase in male physicle activity which were 53% and 43.1 respectivily. And at the, they reached near to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers most parts of the task by reporting key features and making comparisons between men and women across the age groups. An overview is attempted, stating that women generally did more physical activity than men in 2010, though this is slightly inaccurate based on the chart where younger men actually showed higher rates. Some data points are reported, such as mentioning that men aged 15 to 24 were at 52.8%, but there are several data inaccuracies and misreadings in the body paragraphs (e.g., mixing up the age groups and values for 45 to 54 and 55 to 64). The response also trails off incomplete at the end. These limitations place the performance at a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response has some basic organization and attempts to sequence information chronologically through the age groups using cohesive devices like 'At the start', 'But', and 'Moreover'. However, progression becomes unclear and confused as the response progresses, particularly with tangled referencing of age groups and data values. Paragraphing is also disrupted, with the writing trailing off abruptly before completion. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or awkward. These factors demonstrate a Band 5.0 level of coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text. Examples include 'physicle' instead of physical, 'od' instead of age, 'drameticaly', and 'respectivily'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'dramatically' and 'decrease', the inaccurate spelling and misuse of terms cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the score from rising higher. This corresponds to a Band 5.0 for lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('female was increasing'), awkward phrasing ('when both reached at the od'), and missing elements as the text cuts off prematurely ('And at the, they reached near to'). Errors are frequent and can cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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