Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
To embark with, it is noticeable that the males in the age group between 15 to 24 did most of regular physical activity in comparision to others in 2010, whereas women had a widespread graph with three age groups recording more than 53% of their women exercising on a daily basis. Moreoever, only two age groups in men equalised or overdid the exercise done by females regularly in the same age group, age 65 and above and 15 to 24, respectively. Whereas, in every single age group from 25 to 34 until 55 to 64, women measured more regular physical activities than men in the same age group, with the greatest difference being in the age group of 35 to 44 with a staggering 52.5% to women and a drop to about 39.5% in men. Meanwhile, both genders recorded approximately the same amount of acticvities carried out in the age grouping of 65 and above with an average of 67%. However, males exercising in their respective age group had an average of 45 % whereas females had and average of 50% , making them 5% more prone to exercise daily when compared with men regardless of the age group.Moreover, males only had the age group of 15 to 24 exceeding the 50% mark .Whereas, females had three age groups , namely 35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 crossing the 50% point ensuring their fitness through aging.
Overall, it becomes apparent that males under the age of 24 and above 15 had the most contribution in exercising regularly whereas females had three of such groups contributing more to the graph comparatively to the males.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the bar chart and making relevant comparisons between genders and age groups. For instance, the student correctly highlights that women aged 35 to 44 recorded the highest female participation at 52.5% while men in that group dropped to 39.5%. However, there are some inaccuracies in data interpretation, such as claiming that 'both genders recorded approximately the same amount of activities carried out in the age grouping of 65 and above with an average of 67%' (which misreads the 46.7% and 47.1% figures). Furthermore, the overview is slightly repetitive and lacks a concise summary of the overarching trends. Therefore, the response fulfills the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text is arranged with an introduction, a body paragraph, and a concluding sentence, providing a coherent overall arrangement. However, paragraphing is somewhat weak, as the main body of the response is crammed into one very long block of text rather than being broken down logically into clear thematic sections. Cohesive devices are used, but some phrases are awkward or mechanical, such as 'To embark with' and 'Moreoever'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas becomes muddled in the middle section when discussing averages and age brackets. This corresponds to a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate to the task, including phrases like 'percentage of Australian men and women', 'regular physical activity', and 'staggering'. However, there are several lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'widespread graph' instead of a varied trend, 'overdid' instead of surpassed, and spelling mistakes like 'Moreoever' and 'acticvities'. Less common vocabulary is used with noticeable inaccuracy. The range is adequate to convey the core information, fitting the descriptor for Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'whereas women had a widespread graph with three age groups recording more than 53%...'. However, grammatical errors and awkward phrasing are frequent throughout the response, including preposition errors ('exercising in their respective age group' instead of age groups) and punctuation or phrasing slips. While these errors rarely impede the overall communication of the data, they prevent the text from achieving a higher band. Control of grammar is consistent with a Band 6.0.
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