Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph illustrate the the proportion of regular physical activity among the Australian men and women in 2010.
overall, it can be deduced from the given chart that majority of females than males had a daily physical activity among all age groups, unless in 15-24 age.
women were more physical active then men.
In 2010, the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity , among 15-24- years old, 52.8% of men exercised regularly, compared with 47.7% of women. In the age group of 24-34 and 35-44, females showed highest interest in exercise at 48.9% and 52.3%, while the figure for men were 42.2% and 39.5% respectively.
The highest percentage for women were recorded among 45 to 54 age group , at 53.3% . However the percentage for men were 43.1%. Talking about age group, 55 to 64 ,the figure for women were recorded 53%, whereas men stood at 45.1% in regular exercise. In last, among people of age group 65 and over, both men and women showed almost similar interest in exercise.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, reporting data for various age groups and making comparisons between Australian men and women in 2010. However, there are notable inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the overview incorrectly states that the majority of females than males had a daily physical activity 'unless in 15-24 age', whereas the chart shows males were also higher in the 65 and over group. Furthermore, minor data inaccuracies appear, such as writing '52.3%' instead of the actual 52.5% for 35-44 females, and phrasing that is occasionally confused. Nevertheless, a general overview is attempted and key trends are touched upon, placing the response at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has an overall structure consisting of an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific age groups. However, paragraphing is fragmented, with several single-sentence paragraphs (e.g., 'women were more physical active then men.') that disrupt the logical flow. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'In last,' instead of 'Finally,' and 'Talking about age group, 55 to 64'. Referencing and logical progression are occasionally disjointed, though an underlying organizational structure is discernible, earning this a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic task communication but contains notable limitations and errors. The student attempts some less common phrases like 'proportion of regular physical activity' and 'highest interest in exercise', but encounters frequent word choice and spelling errors, such as 'illustrate the the', 'more physical active then men' (using 'physical' instead of 'physically' and 'then' instead of 'than'), and awkward phrasing like 'showed highest interest in exercise'. These errors do not entirely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the given bar graph illustrate', 'the figure for men were'), missing articles, and punctuation mistakes (unnecessary spaces before commas). Complex structures are often faulty or awkward, such as 'In 2010, the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity , among 15-24- years old, 52.8% of men exercised regularly...'. The high frequency of grammatical slips places this at Band 5.0.
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