Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Different type of age groups of meal and female are doing regular activities in Australia in 2010. The different type of regular activity shows with bothb age groups male and female.
Overall, the amount of percent was highest peak point in Australia like that, 15 to 24, 25 to 34 and 35 to 44. but unfortunately, a great number female age groups were extremely regular activities decreased in Australia, such as, 55 to 64 and almost 65 and over.
The 15 to 24 male groups in Australia, a lot of doing regular physical activities were reach 52.8 and feamle focused on these physics activities were less 47.7 in Australia. the other male age groups were 25 to 34 less rather first age groups.
On the other hand, 35 to 44 female age groups were at hight point was 52.5 withb others age group and also the above the 60 age female minmum regularly doing activity in Australia was 47.1.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by reporting on the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010. However, the selection and reporting of main features is problematic. The overview paragraph is largely incomprehensible and fails to clearly summarize the overarching trends, such as the general patterns across different age groups. While some specific data points are mentioned (e.g., 52.8 for 15-24 males and 52.5 for 35-44 females), the comparisons are imprecise and difficult to follow due to poor expression. The information provided is disjointed and lacks a clear, structured summary of the visual data. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a band score of 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the response is weak, and the overall progression of ideas is hindered by severe language errors. The text is divided into short paragraphs, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical. Words like 'Overall', 'On the other hand', and 'such as' are used inappropriately or awkwardly, such as in 'such as, 55 to 64 and almost 65 and over'. Referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader confused about which group or data point is being discussed. There is a lack of logical sequencing between sentences, making the text difficult to navigate smoothly. This corresponds to a band score of 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and frequently inaccurate. The student makes numerous word choice and word formation errors, such as using 'meal' instead of 'male', 'withb' for 'with', 'feamle' for 'female', and 'physics activities' instead of 'physical activities'. Phrases like 'amount of percent was highest peak point' and 'extremely regular activities decreased' demonstrate a lack of control over basic lexical items and collocations. The range is inadequate for this task, and spelling errors are recurrent, resulting in a band score of 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, and the sentences attempted are heavily flawed. There are frequent, fundamental errors in basic sentence construction, agreement, and prepositions, such as 'The different type of regular activity shows with bothb age groups male and female' and 'a lot of doing regular physical activities were reach 52.8'. Complex sentence forms are either absent or entirely faulty, leading to numerous instances where meaning is distorted or obscured. Grammatical control is weak throughout, justifying a band score of 4.0.
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