Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate below percentage of australia men and women in different age group are regular physical activity in 2010.

OVERALL the age group is 45 to 54 is a very maximum percentage for women is 53.3%and most minimum percentage is the age group is 39.5 for men.

Percentage of australian men and women doing regular physical activityin 2010. The age group of 15 to 24 men is 52.8% and women was 47.7%. Age group 25 to 34 men percentage is 42.2% and women is 48.9%. The age group 35 to 44 percentage is 39.5% men and women 52.5%. Age group 45 to 54 men percentage is a 43.1% and women was a 53.3%. And second last age group is 55 to 64 men was a 45.1%and women are 53%. At Lastly, the age group is 64 and over the percentage of men is 46.7% and women is 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting specific percentages for both men and women across the different age groups. However, the overview is poorly integrated and confused, incorrectly identifying 45 to 54 as containing the 'very maximum percentage for women' while listing a figure (39.5) instead of an age group for the minimum percentage for men. Although the student reports the data for each age group, the lack of a clear, coherent summary of trends prevents the response from reaching a higher band. It partially addresses the prompt by listing the figures, but fails to effectively synthesise or highlight the most salient comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from poor structural organisation and a lack of proper paragraphing. The response begins with a fragmented introductory sentence, followed by an abrupt 'OVERALL' section that is grammatically confused, and then collapses into a single, repetitive block of data rather than logically structured body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, relying heavily on repetitive sentence structures ('men percentage is ... and women is ...') without effective referencing or logical progression. This mechanical listing severely disrupts the flow and readability of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily reliant on simple terms like 'percentage', 'men', 'women', and 'age group'. There are several instances of awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'very maximum percentage' and 'most minimum percentage', as well as incomplete or confused expressions like 'At Lastly'. While the numerical data is transcribed, the lexical range is severely limited, restricting the student's ability to discuss the visual data with precision or appropriate academic style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive declarative structures listing statistics. There are numerous foundational errors throughout the text, including missing verbs ('The bar chart illustrate below'), incorrect prepositions ('in different age group'), and awkward word order. Complex structures are absent, and basic subject-verb agreement or tense consistency is frequently flawed (e.g., 'men was a 43.1% and women was a 53.3%'). These frequent errors impede smooth reading and demonstrate weak control over basic grammatical forms.

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