Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the bar chart demonstrates the percentage of Australian men and women in several age genre who have done daily physical activity in 2010
as we can see in the male at age 15 to 24, we see the male has been regularly actvity is higher then the female, 52.8% of male and 47.7 % of female. furthermore, from the age 25 to 64 the female activity is big jump campare to the male. the female percentages are 48.9 to 53.3%. another important fact is the age of 65 and over are staying closely together.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 94 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to an under-developed summary of the chart. While the student correctly identifies some features, such as the highest male activity in the 15 to 24 age bracket (52.8%) and the 65 and over age group being close together, the reporting is incomplete and lacks a proper overall overview. Key trends across the female age groups and overall comparisons are either missed or described vaguely, such as the claim that female activity saw a 'big jump' compared to males, which misinterprets the fluctuating data. This warrants a band score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text lacks clear overall progression and paragraphing, consisting of just a brief introduction and a single run-on body block. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, such as 'as we can see', 'furthermore', and 'another important fact'. The referencing is sometimes imprecise, as seen in phrases like 'in the male at age 15 to 24, we see the male has been regularly actvity'. Although the general topic is maintained throughout the response, the lack of appropriate paragraph structure and cohesive management restricts the clarity and logical flow of ideas. This level of organization aligns with the band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is narrow and repetitive, containing numerous word choice errors and unnatural collocations. For instance, the student refers to age groups as 'several age genre' instead of categories or brackets, and uses 'regularly actvity' instead of regular activity. Phrasing such as 'big jump campare to the male' is overly conversational and lacks the precision expected in an academic task. While the numbers and basic topic-related words like 'percentage', 'men', and 'women' are understood, the limited control over less common items and persistent lexical errors constrain the score to band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues throughout the text, such as missing capitalization ('the bar chart...', 'as we can see...'), incorrect verb tenses ('who have done daily physical activity' instead of who participated in regular physical activity), and subject-verb agreement issues ('the age of 65 and over are staying'). These frequent errors and clumsy structures frequently cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a higher band level. This performance corresponds to a band score of 4.5.
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