Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart below illustrates the number of men and women of different age who live in Austria who did physical activity regularly in 2010 .

Overall, their is large number of women who leads the men in physical activity but if we see according to age the teenager men leads from women but imon other side the older men and women remains stable.

However we see main lead of teenage men from teenage women the age is between 15-24 the percentage of men in physical activity is 52.8% and next the age is 25-34 the women lead in physical activity to men the percentage of women is 48.9 and the age is now 35-44 women considerably leads the men in physical activity the ratio of girls is 52.5% and men is 39.5% their is a huge difference of 13% as seen .

At the age of 45 to over , woman clearly leads with huge difference to men also in age of 45-54 the percentage of women is 53.3% the difference in percentage is 10.2% and in the age of 55-64 women compete men in physical activity and the last stage women and men around 65 to over there is little bit different it almost constant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response addresses the prompt by attempting to summarize the main features and comparisons of the chart, but it contains several factual inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the student states that the country is Austria (the prompt specifies Australia) and claims that men lead overall, which is incorrect as women have higher participation rates in most age groups. While some specific data points are cited (e.g., 52.8% for young men and 52.5% for women aged 35-44), the overview is weak, confused, and partly inaccurate. Overall, the task achievement is limited by misinterpretations of the data and a lack of a clear, coherent summary of the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The organization of the text is weak and lacks clear paragraphing logic. The response is essentially structured as a single massive block of sentences after a brief introduction, rather than distinct paragraphs for an overview and body details. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly (e.g., 'their is', 'if we see according to age', 'and next the age is'), which creates a choppy and repetitive reading experience. Progression throughout the text is difficult to follow due to run-on sentences and a lack of standard transitional phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'teenager men leads from women', 'the older men and women remains stable', 'the ratio of girls'). There are also inappropriate terms used for age groups, such as calling people aged 65 and over 'the last stage'. While the student attempts to use some task-specific vocabulary like 'percentage' and 'difference', the numerous lexical limitations and inaccuracies impede clear communication at times.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent basic errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'their is large number', 'women and men around 65 to over there is little bit different'), run-on sentences, and incorrect prepositions. Complex sentence structures are attempted, but they are almost always flawed and tangled (e.g., 'However we see main lead of teenage men from teenage women the age is between 15-24...'). Punctuation is also poorly handled, resulting in confusing sentence boundaries.

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