Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of men and women among different age categories in Australia who were involved in physical activity regularly during the year 2010.
Overall, women involved more in physical exercises after the age of 24 as compared to men, whereas men dominated the women during age group 15 to 24 as percentages are 52.8% and 47.7% respectively.
During the ages of 25 to 34, women performed more activity as their numbers climbed to 48.9%, on the other hand, the percentage for men fell to 42.2%. After that, female numbers jumped rapidly to 52.5%, however for male, numbers decreased to 39.5% during age group 35 to 44.
In age group 45 to 54, percentages for both men and women increased to 43.1% and 53.3% respectively. The numbers for men inclined to 45.1%, but slightly declined to 53% for women. In the final age category (65 and over), the percentages for men and women were 46.7% and 47.1% respectively, which depicted the sharp decline in female numbers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the age groups. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, capturing the broader trend that women generally had higher participation rates after the age of 24. Key data points, such as the peak for young men (52.8%) and the figures for the 35–44 age bracket, are accurately cited from the chart. The response is fully grounded in the provided data without any notable omissions or inventions, fulfilling the requirements for Band 7.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression. Information is grouped reasonably into paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific age ranges. A variety of cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'whereas', 'on the other hand', and 'however'. However, some cohesive links feel slightly mechanical or repetitive in structure. Paragraphing is adequate, though grouping the detailed data points slightly differently could have enhanced the flow. Overall, the logical structure meets the criteria for Band 6.5, rounded to 6.0 based on minor mechanical cohesion flaws.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, including terms like 'percentage', 'category', 'dominated', and 'declined'. There are successful attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'involved', 'climbed', and 'jumped rapidly'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'women involved more in physical exercises' instead of 'participated more', and 'female numbers' rather than 'participation rates among women'. These errors do not impede communication, placing the response solidly in the Band 6 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and comparative structures effectively (e.g., 'whereas men dominated the women during age group 15 to 24 as percentages are 52.8% and 47.7% respectively'). There are some grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('during age group' instead of 'during the age group') and tense inconsistencies ('as percentages are' instead of 'were'). Nevertheless, these errors rarely impede communication and the meaning remains clear throughout, aligning with the Band 6 descriptors.
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