Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of australian men and women relate with different age groups who did physical activity in 2010.

Overall, Men performed minimum physical activities in all age of group except 15 to 24 age group, while the women doing maximum excercising activities in all ages except 15 to 24 age group.

In 2010, men had more participated in physical acitivitues accounted for 52.8% and women had 47.7% the group relate to 15 to 24 years old. The age group of 25 to 34 men was spend less time 42.2% and women spent more time like 48.9 % as compare to age group of 35 to 44 women had increased and men had lowest with 52.2% , 39.5%.

Moreover, the age group of 45 to 54 the women participated in physical acyivities more than men with repectively 53.3%, 43.1%. 53% women activly particpated in different activities men always as lower with 43.1% age group of 55 to 64. the last age group remain stable women and men with 47.1%, 46.7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, correctly identifying some key data points such as the 15 to 24 age bracket and the peak figures for women. However, the overview and body paragraphs contain several inaccurate statements and misreadings of the chart. For instance, the statement 'men had lowest with 52.2%, 39.5%' is confusing and factually incorrect regarding the data, and the overview lacks a clear, accurate summary of the broader trends. The response attempts comparisons, but lapses in data accuracy and clarity pull the score down to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall arrangement are weak. The introduction is followed by an attempt at an overview that is muddled. Body sentences are heavily crowded with disconnected data points, such as 'The age group of 25 to 34 men was spend less time 42.2% and women spent more time like 48.9 % as compare to age group of 35 to 44 women had increased'. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a mechanical and repetitive reading experience. Referencing and paragraphing structure require significant improvement.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

Vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'men', 'women', 'age group', and 'physical activity'. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'relate with different age groups', 'performed minimum physical activities', and 'more participated in physical acitivitues'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'excercising', 'acitivitues', 'as compare', 'repectively', and 'particpated'. These inaccuracies constrain the communication and place the response firmly in Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences are attempted, but attempts at more complex or comparative structures are consistently faulty, such as 'while the women doing maximum excercising activities' and 'the age group of 45 to 54 the women participated... with repectively 53.3%, 43.1%'. Errors in verb tense, preposition use, and sentence construction are frequent and often impede the reader's understanding, reflecting the descriptors for a Band 4.5.

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