Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of australian men and women related to different age groups who did physical activity in 2010.
Overall, men performed minimum physical activities in all age groups except 15 to 24 age group, while the women did maximum excercising activities in all ages except 15 to 24 age group.
In 2010, men participated in physical activities accounted for 52.8% and women accounted for 47.7% the group related to 15 to 24 years old. The age group of 25 to 34 men spent less time 42.2% and women spent more time about 48.9 %,compare to the age group of 35 to 44 women had increased and men had the lowest with 52.2% , 39.5%.
Moreover, the age group of 45 to 54 women participated in physical activities more than men with repectively 53.3%, 43.1%. 53% women actively particpated in different activities, while men were lower with 43.1% in the age group of 55 to 64. The last age group remained stable women and men for 47.1%, 46.7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student addresses the main features of the chart by providing data for both genders across all age groups. An overview is attempted at the beginning, noting that men and women generally followed contrasting patterns across age groups, except for the 15-24 category. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that men had the lowest with '52.2%, 39.5%', which misrepresents the figures from the chart where men in the 35-44 group actually stood at 39.5% and women at 52.5%. Furthermore, the description becomes a mechanical listing of figures rather than a fully synthesised comparison. Because of the noticeable data inaccuracies and underdeveloped overview, this performance aligns with Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has a basic structure, beginning with an introduction, followed by body details, but it lacks clear paragraph breaks, presenting most of the body content as a single dense block of text. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes awkwardly, such as 'Moreover' and 'The last age group remained stable women and men for 47.1%, 46.7%'. Progression is somewhat hindered by abrupt transitions between sentences and unclear referencing (e.g., 'compare to the age group of 35 to 44 women had increased'). While there is a discernible overall arrangement moving through the age groups, the faulty cohesion and lack of appropriate paragraphing restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for a basic summary of the chart, featuring terms like 'proportion', 'participated', and 'stable'. However, there are spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'australian' (uncapitalized), 'excercising', 'repectively', and 'particpated'. The student attempts less common expressions like 'minimum physical activities' and 'actively participated', but collocations are occasionally unnatural. Repetition of basic verbs ('spent time', 'participated') limits lexical flexibility. Communication is not seriously impeded, but the range of vocabulary is narrow and prone to inaccuracies, fitting the Band 5.5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'men participated in physical activities accounted for' (missing relative pronoun/participle) and 'the age group of 25 to 34 men spent less time 42.2% and women spent more time about 48.9 %' (faulty clause structure and punctuation). Punctuation and sentence boundary errors frequently cause the reader difficulty. Due to the high frequency of grammatical slips and lack of error-free complex sentences, this warrants a Band 5.0.
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