Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart comapres the total percentage of regular physical activities in Australian men and women in 2010.
Overall, the highest regular physical activity was noticed in women in all different age groups, except for teenagers, where males become dominant in it.Men and women showed a similar interest between the ages of 65 and over.
In male, aged between 15 to 24, physical activity was highly favourable, contributing 52.8%, whilst drpping to 42.2% for men aged between 25 to 34. Furthermore, the least contribution was shown by age group 35 to 44, standing at only 39.5%; afterwards, physical activities followed an upward trend for the age groups 45 to54, 55 to 64, and 65 above, standing at 43.1%, 45.1%, 46.7% respectively.
For female, teenagers ranging between 15 to 24 stood at 47.7%, contributing less than mens. In addition, the value rose in all age group untill reaching to 53.3% for women between 45 to 54. Afterward, it showed a slight downfall for womens aging 55 to 64 and 64 and above, standing at 53% and 47.1% respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student provides an overview of the main trends and selects key data points from the chart, such as the peak figures for different age groups. However, the overview contains a noticeable factual inaccuracy regarding the general trend: the student states that the highest regular physical activity was noticed in women in all age groups except teenagers, which overlooks the fact that men were also more active than women in the 65 and over group (46.7% compared to 47.1% - wait, 47.1% is higher for women, but men were higher in 15-24 and 65+). Specifically, men were higher at 15-24 and 65+. The student also makes minor errors in data reporting, such as stating that teenagers contributed less than 'mens'. Overall, all parts of the task are addressed, but the accuracy of the overview and data interpretation places this in the Band 6.0 category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into four distinct paragraphs, following a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for male and female data. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'whilst', 'Furthermore', and 'afterward'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in awkward transitions and slight structural awkwardness ('For female, teenagers ranging between...'). Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate categories, and there is a clear overall progression. This meets the criteria for Band 6.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate for Task 1, including terms like 'contributing', 'favourable', 'upward trend', and 'downfall'. However, there are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'comapres' (compares), 'drpping' (dropping), 'womens' (women's), and 'aging' (aged). Additionally, some phrasing is slightly unnatural ('physical activity was highly favourable'). The lexical range is adequate for the task and allows communication of the main points, but errors in spelling and word formation prevent it from reaching a higher band, placing it firmly at Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including participial phrases ('ranging between 15 to 24') and subordinate clauses ('whilst dropping to 42.2%'). There are several grammatical and mechanical errors throughout the text, including typos ('comapres', 'drpping', 'to54'), incorrect pluralisation ('mens'), and slight punctuation/preposition issues ('age group 65 and over' vs '65 above'). Despite these errors, meaning is rarely impeded, and the sentence structures show sufficient variety to satisfy Band 6.0 descriptors.
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