Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The following bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

In the age of 15 to 24 men performed 52.85% regular physical activities and in the same age women performed 47.7% regular physical activities. So men performed more then the women.

But in the age between 25 to 34 the women did more regular physical activities then the men in 2010. In Australia the women did more physical activities to keep them healthy in the age between 25 to 64.

However, the men did activities but less then the women in 2010. The percentage of women regular activities were more then the men in 2010. In 2010 the men of Australia did more activities in the age of 15 to 24. In the age of 65 and over the men and women performed physical activities equally.

In conclusion, the women performed more then the men.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures for different age groups in the 2010 bar chart, such as noting that men aged 15 to 24 stood at 52.85% while women were at 47.7%. However, the overview is extremely repetitive and simplistic, repeating the phrase 'in 2010' and generalising broadly ('the women performed more then the men') without effectively synthesising the overall trends. Furthermore, some data points are inaccurate or misread, such as stating that 'in the age of 65 and over the men and women performed physical activities equally', whereas the chart clearly shows 46.7% for males and 47.1% for females. These limitations place the response at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is organized into short paragraphs, but the overall progression lacks sophistication. The student relies heavily on basic, repetitive cohesive links such as 'In the age of...', 'But in the age between...', and 'However, the men did activities...'. The referencing is frequently clunky, and sentences jump from point to point without a smooth logical flow or effective summarization. Paragraphing is present, but individual paragraphs consist of isolated, repetitive statements rather than cohesive groupings of related data points. This corresponds to a Band 5 for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'performed regular physical activities', 'did more physical activities', and 'in the age of' are used over and over again with almost no variation. There is a lack of flexibility or less common lexical items appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. Spelling errors are also present, most notably the recurring confusion between 'then' and 'than' (e.g., 'more then the women'). Because the range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive with noticeable errors, it fits Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response shows a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple or repetitively constructed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'In the age of 15 to 24 men performed...' (missing prepositions and articles) and 'to keep them healthy in the age between 25 to 64' (awkward preposition use). Additionally, spelling and word form errors persist. While the meaning is generally decipherable, the frequency of structural errors and the lack of varied complex forms restrict the score to a Band 5.

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