Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart conpares the percentage of mens and women in different ages group who did regular physical activity in Australia.
Overall,the women were more active than mens in mostly groups.Thr age 15 to 24 mens were more active than womens,while on the other groups women were more active than mens.In the last group the age of 65 and more boths are same.
In the age of 15 to 24 mens were more active than women the percentange of mens physical activity is 52.8% and womens physical activity percentage is 47.7%.On the other hand the aged from 25 to 34 the percentage of womens physical activity rise to 48.9 percentage , while mens physical activity percentage fall to 42.2 %.The aged group of 35 to 44 womens physical activity were more increased to 52.5 %, whereas the mens physical activity percentage is 39.5%
For tge 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 the percentage of womes physical activity was more rose than mens .In the last at the age of 65 and more their both activities are similar
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting the main features and making comparisons between Australian men and women across different age groups. An overview is attempted at the beginning of the second paragraph, noting that women were generally more active than men. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the data: for instance, the student states that 'In the last group the age of 65 and more boths are same', whereas the chart shows male participation at 46.7% and female at 47.1%. Additionally, the data points for some age brackets are described rather vaguely or partially, and key trends like the fluctuating male participation are not fully synthesised. These data misreadings and slightly fragmented reporting place this aspect of the response in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is arranged into paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, an overview, and body details. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor paragraphing, abrupt transitions, and frequent structural fragmentation (such as sentences being awkwardly broken or run together, e.g., 'In the age of 15 to 24 mens were more active than women the percentange of...'). Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive or inaccurate ('On the other hand', 'For tge'). Although an overall progression is discernible, referencing is often unclear due to grammatical issues, resulting in a performance that aligns with Band 5 descriptors for cohesion and coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms related to data reporting such as 'percentage', 'active', 'rise', and 'fall'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('conpares', 'mens', 'percentange', 'womes', 'tge') and word-formation errors ('aged group', 'activities are similar'). Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success and lexical control is shaky. Although communication is not entirely impeded, the frequent spelling and word-choice errors restrict the lexical score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at complex or compound structures are consistently marred by punctuation errors, run-on sentences, and missing articles or prepositions (e.g., 'Overall,the women were more active than mens in mostly groups'). Errors in subject-verb agreement and pluralisation (e.g., 'boths are same', 'womes physical activity') are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader. Given the high frequency of grammatical inaccuracies and the lack of complex sentence control, a Band 4.5 is warranted, rounded to 5.0 as per standard whole/half band conventions.
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