Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The information about, percentage of Australian man and woman different types of age groups who did physically exercise in 2010 is delineated by provided table chart.

overall,percentage of Australian man all ages were fluctuated where as all the groups of ages were mostly went up.

digging deeper into,we can see that percentage of the female and male were went up similar from 53.8 to 52.5 from 15 to24 and 35 to 44. percentage of the 15 to 24 and 60 and above nearly between 47.7 and 47.1 and also 60 and above were slightly steady at around 47.

moreover, in three age group of the percent in females were steady at approximately 53

Here by , I conclude my report.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, standing at only 120 words, which negatively impacts the score. While the student attempts to summarise the chart showing the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010, the overview is extremely vague ('percentage of Australian man all ages were fluctuated where as all the groups of ages were mostly went up'). The selection of data points is confused, inaccurate, and misreads the visual data (for instance, claiming female and male percentages went up similarly from 53.8 to 52.5). There is a lack of clear comparison and proper reporting of the main features, resulting in a partial and underdeveloped response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response features significant organizational issues. The formatting includes awkward spacing and an informal conversational sign-off ('Here by , I conclude my report.') which is entirely inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. Paragraphing is disjointed and chaotic, with fragmented sentences acting as standalone paragraphs. Cohesive devices are either misused, overused, or absent, and referencing is unclear throughout the text. There is no clear logical progression or flow, making the information difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is severely limited and repetitive. The student makes numerous basic lexical errors, such as spelling and word-form mistakes ('man and woman' instead of men and women, 'physically exercise' instead of physical exercise, 'table chart' instead of bar chart). There is an inability to use less common vocabulary accurately, and word choices are often unnatural or incorrect. These lexical inaccuracies and limitations cause strain for the reader and impede clear communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely narrow, dominated by faulty and broken sentence structures. There are persistent, severe grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('percentage of Australian man all ages were fluctuated', 'percentage of the female and male were went up'), incorrect prepositions, and poor punctuation. Complex sentence attempts are uniformly flawed and lead to ungrammatical constructions. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader.

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