Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustrates comparison of various age group in men and women who indulge in physical activity regularly during 2010 in Australia.
Overall the data from the chart is reflecting that male from the australia losing the interest as their age grows untill 44. However , after males cross the age of 45 they start building their interest in physical activities .Females from australia reflect their commitment towards activities untill their age surge then 65.
Men from 15 to 24 of age are highly fascinating form the physiical activity around 52.8 while female belongs to 45 to 54 of age group witness a large involvement in physical activities nearly 53.3 . As per the chart it is observe that males whose age exceed from 35 they were expressing least interest in the activities where as the females over 65 year due to multiple medical issues they are not as interested as the younger females .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting trends for both genders across age groups. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that males lose interest 'untill 44' and that those 'over 35 they were expressing least interest', which misses the actual lowest point for men (35 to 44 at 39.5%, though 25 to 34 is 42.2% and 45 to 54 is 43.1%). Furthermore, the student introduces outside speculation not found in the data, such as claiming females over 65 have lower participation 'due to multiple medical issues'. While an overview is attempted, the underdeveloped analysis and data misreadings restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into an introduction, an overview/body paragraph, and a concluding set of details, but the paragraphing lacks clarity and proper separation of ideas. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, resulting in a choppy and disjointed reading experience. For example, sentences are linked awkwardly with phrases like 'However , after' and 'As per the chart it is observe that'. There is a lack of clear progression, and the management of referencing is faulty (e.g., 'male from the australia losing the interest as their age grows'). Cohesion is mechanical and inadequate, aligning with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and often unnatural or inaccurate. Examples include 'indulge in physical activity', 'losing the interest', 'highly fascinating form the physiical activity', and 'large involvement'. There are frequent word choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'age surge then 65', 'form' instead of 'from', 'observe' instead of 'observed'). The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with misspelled words ('physiical', 'untill') causing noticeable strain for the reader. This performance sits firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are heavily flawed and ungrammatical. There are numerous basic grammatical errors throughout the text, such as missing articles ('comparison of various age group in men and women'), incorrect prepositions ('from the australia'), subject-verb agreement issues ('male... losing', 'females... reflect'), and tense confusion ('it is observe'). Punctuation is also faulty, with spaces placed before commas. Because errors occur in almost every sentence and frequently impede comprehension, the grammar score is Band 4.0.
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