Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart below illustrates the proportion of the time devoted in doing usual physical exercise by men and women of Australia in 2010.
Overall, the women from all group ages dominated and spent mosly their time doing regualr activities except the male youngsters. The teenager men were the only age group who spent more time exercising rather than the women.
By looking at the detailed data, the aged women and men accounted for 53.3% and 43.1% of the total distribution, respectively. The citizens in their early 60s shared the approximately same ratio which commenced at 47.1%. The elderly men who were in their early 30s made up for 39.5% of the total ratio. The younger generation of men comprised for 52.8% and the women shared 47.7% of the total percentage. The age group of really old women accounted for 46.7%. The women from their early 20s and so on made up for 42.2% of the final distribution.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, providing an overview and some specific data points. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that 'the aged women and men accounted for 53.3% and 43.1%', misinterpreting the age categories (53.3% is actually for 45-54 year old women). Furthermore, phrases like 'the elderly men who were in their early 30s' reveal a fundamental confusion about age groups and data interpretation. While an overview is attempted, the misinterpretation of figures and age brackets prevents the response from reaching a higher band. It satisfies the basic requirements of summarising information, but the inaccuracies in data referencing pull the score down to a 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. Cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'Overall', 'By looking at the detailed data', and 'respectively'. However, the logical progression is hindered by confusing sentence structures and erratic movement through the data points. Paragraphing is present, but the body of the text lacks a smooth, coherent flow due to disjointed and inaccurate sentences. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with regard to pronouns and age categories. Overall arrangement shows some organisation, but the faulty cohesion and lack of clear progression limit the score to a 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and collocation. Examples include 'usual physical exercise' instead of 'regular physical activity', 'group ages' instead of 'age groups', and 'teenager men' instead of 'young men'. There are also awkward phrases like 'dominated and spent mosly their time' and 'shared the approximately same ratio'. Spelling errors such as 'mosly' and 'regualr' are present. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with errors causing some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent errors that impede clarity. Simple sentence forms are mixed with faulty attempts at complex structures. Examples of ungrammatical phrasing include 'the proportion of the time devoted in doing' instead of 'devoted to doing', 'except the male youngsters', and 'comprised for 52.8%' (confusing 'comprised' and 'comprised of' or 'accounted for'). Punctuation is generally basic, and grammatical errors occur in almost every sentence. Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause confusion regarding the meaning, the grammar warrants a 4.5 or 5.0; a 5.0 is awarded as meaning is still partially recoverable.
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