Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian boys and girls in various age factor who did physical activities on daily basis in 2010.
Overall, both men and women showed significant change in different age groups. Women was at its highest point,while men was at its average ratio. The rapid decline was seen in men ratio of 35 to 44 group. The gradual increase was seen in women ratio of 45 to 54 group.
Firstly, the ratio of men in the age factor of 15 to 24 was 52.8%. In the adult age 25 to 34 the ratio of men exercises gradually decreased at 42.2%. The group of 45 to 54 there's a significant increase at 43.1%. The rapid increase in the factor of 55 to 64 age group and in the next age group of 65 to over the physical activities of men suddenly increased at 46.7%.
Secondly, the ratio of women physical activity was highest from men age group. The group of 15 to 24 was at 47.7%. The significant increase in adult group of 25 to 34 standing at 48.9%. In the next groupof 34 to 44 there's rapid increase standing at 52.5%. On the other hand, the group of 45 to 54 there is change that women is doing exercise gradually standing at 53.3%. in the next g
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting trends across different age groups for both men and women. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data and a noticeable cut-off at the end of the text where the description is incomplete. Phrases like 'women was at its highest point, while men was at its average ratio' are vague and fail to effectively summarize the overall trends. While some data points are successfully cited, such as the 15 to 24 age group for men at 52.8%, the lack of a fully realized overview and the incomplete ending limit the effectiveness of the task response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text is divided into paragraphs, including a brief introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for men and women. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical use of cohesive devices prevents the response from flowing smoothly. Furthermore, because the essay breaks off mid-sentence at the very end, overall structural completeness is compromised.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying heavily on terms like 'ratio', 'group', and 'increase'. There are noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as referring to adults as 'boys and girls' in the introduction, and using 'age factor' instead of 'age group'. While the student attempts to use less common vocabulary like 'gradually decreased' and 'significant increase', inaccuracies in word formation and collocation prevent higher band achievement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a limited range of sentence structures, with frequent grammatical and syntactic errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Women was at its highest point' and 'men was at its average ratio'. Prepositional and structural errors are also present, as seen in 'in the next groupof 34 to 44 there's rapid increase'. Complex sentence attempts are often awkward or faulty, and the abrupt end of the text leaves grammatical structures unresolved, though communication of simple data points is occasionally achieved.
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