Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given diagram illustrates that the percentage of australian men and women doing regular physical activity from 2010.
overall the male and female percentage are rose and declined in the various types of percentage.The male and female age are comparatively different sectors.
the female age 15 there is 52.8 % will steadily rose and the male age will be decline at 47.7%.in the age of 34 increase at 48.9% and the age of 44 the male has 52.5% and the age of 54 of male has 53.3% and the age of 64 should at 54%.
similarly,the male and female age are different and the percentage are also different .
the age are different but the percentage will be same.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, finishing at 119 words, which negatively impacts Task Achievement. Content-wise, the student attempts to summarise the chart, but the data reported is largely inaccurate and confused. For instance, the text states that 'the female age 15 there is 52.8% will steadily rose and the male age will be decline at 47.7%', which misreads the provided figures and mixes up the genders and age groups. Key trends are not clearly highlighted, and there is no coherent overview of the main features shown in the chart. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, warranting a band score of 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks clear logical organisation and progression. The text is broken into short, fragmented sentences and single-sentence paragraphs that fail to develop ideas effectively. There is an absence of appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas together smoothly. While the attempt to introduce an overview with 'overall' is noted, the subsequent sentences lack clear referencing and logical progression, making the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is inadequate, and overall cohesion is faulty, corresponding to a band score of 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent misuse of terms related to data reporting. The student relies on elementary words such as 'percentage', 'rose', 'declined', and 'increase', but often misapplies them to data points or confuses them with age numbers (e.g., 'the female age 15'). There are also spelling and capitalization issues ('australian', 'overall'). The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a precise summary of statistical data, restricting the score to a 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence structures. The response contains frequent grammatical errors, such as missing verbs, incorrect preposition usage, and faulty tense application (e.g., 'the percentage of australian men and women doing regular physical activity from 2010' lacks a main verb; 'percentage are rose and declined'). These frequent errors cause significant strain for the reader and obscure the intended meaning, placing the performance at a band score of 4.0.
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