Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of men and women doing regular physical activity in Australia in the year 2010.

According to the the chart, the younger mans at the age of 15 to 24 do physical activity at the rate of 52 percent on each 60, however women on this age do physical activity at 47 percent. The man and women at the age between 25 to 34 do physical activity at the rate of 42 and 48 percent. Anyhow the age between 35 to 44 of men do at 29 percent and women at 53 percent. Men of age 25 to 54 do physical work at 42 percent and women a 53 percent, also the retired people of 55 to 64 years of age do physical activity of men 45 percent and women at the higher rate of 53 percent. The people of 65 and above do physical work at approximately the same rate of men and women about 46 and 57 each.

In conclude, the bar chart gives the information of man and women do physicak work at different ages in year 2010 in Australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the task by reporting several data points from the chart, such as mentioning that younger men aged 15 to 24 participated at 52 percent. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data when compared to the visual reference. For instance, the student states that men aged 35 to 44 participated at 29 percent (the actual figure is 39.5%), and later repeats contradictory or garbled data. Furthermore, the overview provided in the conclusion ('man and women do physicak work at different ages') is extremely simplistic and fails to adequately summarise the main trends, such as the contrasting patterns between genders across age groups. Because of inaccurate data reporting and underdeveloped overviews, the response earns a band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is structured into three brief paragraphs, including a short introduction, a body paragraph, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak because sentences within the body paragraph jump haphazardly between different age groups and genders without a clear organising principle or comparison strategy. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., 'Anyhow', 'also', 'In conclude'), and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points belong to which demographic. Paragraphing is also insufficient due to the lack of clear separation between different trends. This performance aligns with band 5.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'do physical activity', 'people', and 'rate'. There are frequent word-choice errors and non-standard phrasing, such as 'younger mans', 'on this age', and 'physicak work'. Attempts to use less common or precise vocabulary are mostly unsuccessful. Spelling mistakes also occur, such as 'physicak'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the general topic of the chart, the range is limited and noticeable errors restrict the score to band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and some more complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues ('younger mans... do', 'women on this age do'), incorrect prepositions ('at the rate of 52 percent on each 60'), and malformed sentence constructions. Punctuation is basic. Because grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader in discerning the intended meaning, this meets the criteria for band 4.5.

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