Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustreat the percentage of Australin male and female in various age groups who did warm up daily in 2010.
Among people aged 15 to 24, 52.8% of male regular physical activity. While female value is 47.%. However ,in the 25 - 34 age group , the propotion of woman increase to 48%. But the male vaule is fall sharply to 42.2%
For those age 35 to 44 and 45 to 54, female participation counitnied rise , reaching 52.5% and 53.3% respectively. In contrast, the percentage for men were lower at 39.5% and 43.1% of men
In the oldest age group, 65 and over, the rates for both genders were almost identical,standing at 47.1 for woman and 46.7% for men
Overall ,woman were more physicaly active then men in almost all the age groups. where the percentage of man excersing regularly was higher than that woman . Female participation generally reamind about 48% , while the figures for males fluctued more significantly
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting several data points from the chart, such as the 15 to 24 age group percentages and the final age group figures. However, there are significant flaws in task completion. The writer misinterprets the prompt's core topic, stating that people 'did warm up daily' instead of participating in regular physical activity. Furthermore, the overview section contains contradictory and confused statements, such as 'where the percentage of man excersing regularly was higher than that woman,' which directly contradicts both the text and the chart data. Due to these inaccuracies and misunderstandings in reporting the main features, the score falls into the Band 5 range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive devices and abrupt transitions, such as starting sentences with dangling conjunctions like 'While female value is 47.%. However ,in the 25 - 34 age group...'. Referencing is also weak, with pronouns and comparatives lacking clear antecedents. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the sentences within paragraphs lacks cohesion. Overall, the arrangement shows some logical progression between the body paragraphs, but mechanical and faulty cohesion keeps this criterion at a Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is quite limited and heavily repetitive. Words like 'percentage', 'age group', and basic verbs are used repeatedly. There are also numerous spelling and word-choice errors, including 'illustreat' instead of 'illustrates', 'Australin' instead of 'Australian', 'propotion' instead of 'proportion', 'woman' instead of 'women' (used frequently in the singular context), and 'excersing' instead of 'exercising'. The vocabulary used is just about adequate to convey basic meaning, but frequent spelling mistakes and unnatural phrasing limit the score to a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with many attempts at complex sentences resulting in faulty grammar and missing verbs, such as in '52.8% of male regular physical activity' where the verb is omitted entirely. Punctuation errors are widespread, including spaces before commas and missing periods at the end of sentences. Subject-verb agreement errors are also present, such as 'the percentage for men were lower' and 'figures for males fluctued'. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to Band 5.
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