Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart below presents that in 2010 Australian men and women in different age categories
who did consistently physical activity.
overall , it is clear that men in the age of 15 to 24 do more exercise however,women in the between 45 to 54 do more excercise.Moreover women do more exercise than men. Also it is clear that in old ages women did more exercise than men.
In the category of 15 to 24 men are more likely to do physical acivity than women and in the group of 25 to 34 women did more exercise thean men ,in section 35 to 44 men's physical activity is only 39.5% and women did 52.5%.In the age group of 45 to 54 men did less exercise than women 43.1 only men and 53.3 women.
In group 55 to 64 men did 45.1% physical acivity on the other hand women did 53 percent.
In the old ages 65 and over there is no more differnce between men and women 46.7% men and 47.1% women.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting specific percentages and comparisons between men and women across different age brackets (e.g., mentioning that men aged 15-24 are more active, while women lead in other groups). However, the response is hampered by a lack of a cohesive and fully realised overview. The opening sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical ("presents that in 2010 Australian men and women in different age categories who did consistently physical activity"). While the writer successfully reports several figures such as 39.5% for men and 52.5% for women in the 35-44 group, the overall summarisation and selection of main trends are underdeveloped, placing this performance at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical flow and cohesion are weak. The second paragraph attempts an overall statement, but it is disjointed and punctuated incorrectly with comma splices and missing spaces (e.g., "however,women"). Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, relying heavily on basic addition like "Also" and juxtaposition like "on the other hand". Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal cohesion and smooth transitions between ideas, resulting in a choppy and disjointed reading experience that matches the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on basic phrasing such as "do more exercise", "did more exercise", and "physical activity". There are noticeable word choice and collocation issues, such as "consistently physical activity" instead of "regular physical activity" and "in old ages" instead of "among older adults". Spelling errors also appear, such as "differnce" and "acivity". While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic data points, the frequent inaccuracies and lack of a wider lexical range restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and direct lists of figures. Attempts at complex or compound structures often result in faulty punctuation, missing verbs, or severe grammatical errors, such as "43.1 only men and 53.3 women" and sentences missing main verbs entirely. Punctuation is frequently incorrect, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and demonstrate weak control over basic sentence patterns, aligning with Band 5.0.
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