Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the bar chart illustrates men and women in australia of different ages who were engaged in doing regular physical activities in 2010. the data are presented in percentages. overall yonger people tend to be more active than older individuals. people who were below 65 they did similar regular physical activities. in detail,from the age 15 to 25 men and women were most engange in regular pysical activities where mere were 52.8 percent and women followed by 47.7%. men who aged to 65 or more were found doing similar proportion of activities . women who were 45 to 54 did the highest regular physical activities touching 53 percent highest among all of them women who were 35 to 64 almost did the same percentage of physical activity.while older individuals both men and women did almost same percentage of physical activity. bar chart shows men who were young were engaged more whereas middle aged women were engaged most
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the chart, such as the highest participation rates for men and women across different age groups (e.g., 52.8% for young men and 53.3% for women aged 45-54). However, there are some inaccurate generalisations and misreadings of the data; for instance, the claim that 'people who were below 65 they did similar regular physical activities' is imprecise given the fluctuations shown. Furthermore, the overview contains a contradictory statement ('younger people tend to be more active' vs 'men who aged to 65 or more were found doing similar proportion'). While key data points are cited, the development and precision of the overview prevent a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear paragraphing, as nearly the entire body of text is compressed into two dense blocks with poor spacing and irregular punctuation usage. While there is an attempt at an overview, it is awkwardly placed and split. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive or misused (e.g., 'in detail, from the age 15 to 25... where mere were 52.8 percent'). Progression is difficult to follow because sentences run together without adequate capitalization or logical transitions, creating a choppy reading experience. Paragraphing is not used sufficiently or appropriately.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is adequate to convey basic information about the chart, using terms such as 'percentage', 'regular physical activities', and 'age group'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'yonger', 'engange', 'pysical', and 'aged to'. The writer attempts less common vocabulary ('proportion', 'individuals'), but these are often coupled with awkward collocations or grammatical mistakes. Word choice lacks precision, which occasionally impedes the natural flow of the description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response shows a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is quite low. There are frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and sentence structure (e.g., 'people who were below 65 they did similar...', 'men who aged to 65 or more were found doing similar proportion'). Run-on sentences and missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns (e.g., 'australia') are persistent issues. While meaning is generally recoverable, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors keeps the score at this level.
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