Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE TY IN CHART HIGHLIGHTS THE TRENDS SIGNIFICANTLY IN PERCENTAGE VALUE OF AUSTRALIAN MEN AND WOMEN DOING DOING REGULAR PHYSICAL ACTIVITY IN 2010.

IF WE LOOK AT THE GRAPH WE SEE DURING THE FIRST MONTH FIFTY PERSON WERE MALES ENGAGED IN PHYSICAL ACTIVITES AND 47 PERCENT WERE FEMALES IN AGE GROUP 15 TO 24. IF WE MOVE FURTHUR WE SEE FROM AGE GROUP 25 TO 64 THE TREND CHANGES TO MORE FEMALES WERE ACTIVILEY ENGAGED IN PHYSICAL ACTIVITES WHILE THE TREND IN MALE FALLS BELOW TILL AGE 44. BUT GRADUALLY INCREASED IN 45 TO 54 AGE GROUP BRACKET AND GOT BALANCED AT AGE 65 AND OVER.

THE GRAPH TELLS US THAT MORE ELDERS BOTH MALE AND FEMALE IN THEIR OLD AGE WERE EQUALLY INVOLVED IN THE PHYSICAL ACTIVITES MAYBE DUE TO LACK OF TIME IN THEIR YOUNG AGE AND LIFESTYLE.

OVERALL THE TREND GIVES US A DETAILED REVIEW OF THE AGE BRACKET

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, noting the participation rates for the 15 to 24 age group and the subsequent shifts between genders across older brackets. However, there are significant misinterpretations of the data, such as claiming that 'fifty person were males' (when the actual figure is 52.8%) and referring to the age categories as 'months'. Furthermore, the overview provided at the end ('OVERALL THE TREND GIVES US A DETAILED REVIEW OF THE AGE BRACKET') is vague and fails to properly synthesise the main trends. These inaccuracies and under-developed generalisations place the response at Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is written in ALL CAPS, which makes it feel like an unformatted block of text. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the main body compressed and lacking clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as 'IF WE MOVE FURTHUR WE SEE'. Reference words are unclear at times, and the overall structure lacks the cohesive flow expected in an Academic Task 1 response. This aligns with a Band 4.0 descriptor.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent misspellings and inappropriate word choices such as 'TY IN CHART' (title in chart), 'ACTIVITES', and 'FURTHUR'. The writer attempts some less common terms like 'ACTIVILEY ENGAGED', but spelling and word-form errors ('PERSON' instead of percent) are prevalent. The range is limited and strains the reader's understanding at times, corresponding to a Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical structures are predominantly simple or faulty complex attempts. There are frequent punctuation and capitalization errors throughout the entirely uppercase text. Sentences lack proper control, with run-on clauses and missing prepositions (e.g., 'trend in male falls below till age 44'). Errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 profile.

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