Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart below compares the information of fitness activity performed by Australian men and women of different age group in 2010.
Overall, we can see the around 52.8% men were doing physical activity on daily basis whereas women are around 47.7 percentage. In addition, this figure is almost altered in 45 to 54 age group which is around 43.1% in male and 53.3% in females, and another category was elderly people of 65 and above which is nearly 46.7% men and 47.1% women which is least from all age group.
Locking first at, the age group of 25 to 34 has declined to 42.2% in males and 48.9% in females. Moreover, afterwards a notified change has occurred in men the number was drop by 2.7% whereas in women this number increases about 52.5% in the 35 to 44 years age group. Similarly, below elderly age group of 55 to 64 years has 53% women doing healthy activity on regular basis surprisingly men has just 45.1% in this situation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the bar chart for various age groups. However, the selection of data is somewhat disjointed and fails to provide a fully clear or logical overview of the main trends. For instance, the opening overview incorrectly interprets the 15 to 24 age group data as a 'daily basis' activity, which misrepresents the prompt ('regular physical activity'). Furthermore, some key comparisons are missed or awkwardly expressed, such as stating that the 65 and above group is the 'least from all age group', which is inaccurate since other groups have lower male participation. The response covers the required task generally, but the analysis lacks precision and structure, placing it firmly in Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some organization with paragraph breaks, but the overall progression is weak and disjointed. Cohesive devices are frequently misused or awkward, such as 'Locking first at,' which appears to be a typographical and lexical error for 'Looking first at.' Referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult to follow the relationships between data points. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs suffers from repetitive phrasing and poor transitional links ('Moreover, afterwards a notified change...'). These issues result in a score of 5.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses a limited range of vocabulary, with noticeable errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'comparing the information of fitness activity', 'notified change', and 'healthy activity on regular basis'. Spelling and word form errors also occur, such as 'male' instead of 'males' and 'females' in parallel structures. While some numerical data is correctly transcribed, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive ('around', 'number', 'group'), fitting the Band 5 descriptor where the lexical range is minimally adequate but restricted.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures frequently result in serious grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and faulty subordination (e.g., 'In addition, this figure is almost altered in 45 to 54 age group which is around 43.1% in male and 53.3% in females, and another category was...'). Errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition use are frequent ('in male', 'in females', 'below elderly age group'). These persistent errors can cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4.0 for grammar.
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