Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in different age groups in 2010.
Overall, it is evident that the highest physical acitivty done by 45 to 54 age group in women gender. Whereas, men had the maximum percentage recorded by 15 to 24 age group.
15 to 24 age group, it was 52.8 and 47.7 percentages activity done by men and women respectively. 35 to 44 age group, it was noticed huge difference between in percentage by both genders. it was roughly 20%. A similar trend was followed by 45 to 54 age group, it was approximently 10 percentage difference in both genders.
However, over 65 age group, it was observed nearly minor difference by both genders. it seen 46.7 in men and 47.1 in women.
15 to 64 age of women had increased in physical acitvity. it was 47.7 percetage to reached 53 percentage by 55 to 64 age group.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task well, providing an overview and selecting key features from the bar chart. You successfully identify high points, such as women aged 45 to 54 having the highest overall participation and men aged 15 to 24 recording the highest male participation. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting specific data points. For instance, you mention a huge difference of 'roughly 20%' for the 35 to 44 age group, whereas the chart shows male participation at 39.5% and female at 52.5%—a difference of 13%, not 20%. Similarly, your overview contains slightly awkward phrasing ('the highest physical acitivty done by 45 to 54 age group in women gender'). Despite these miscalculations and minor imprecisions, the main trends are reported, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has an overall logical arrangement, beginning with an introduction and a clear overview paragraph, followed by body sentences detailing specific age groups. However, paragraphing and cohesion are somewhat faulty and mechanical. Sentences are often disjointed, and referencing or cohesive links between sentences are weak or missing entirely (e.g., starting sentences abruptly with '15 to 24 age group, it was...' or 'A similar trend was followed by...'). Furthermore, there is a lack of smooth transitions between the different age brackets discussed. These organizational flaws and repetitive structural openings place this criterion at Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying basic concepts related to percentages, age groups, and physical activity. You attempt some less common vocabulary and comparative phrases, but there are noticeable lexical errors, awkward word choices, and spelling mistakes throughout the text. Examples include 'acitivty', 'women gender', 'percentages activity', 'approximently', and 'percetage'. Additionally, phrases like 'it seen 46.7 in men' demonstrate limited control over word formation and collocation. Because these errors occur frequently and occasionally cause slight difficulty for the reader, this criterion warrants a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak, with frequent errors in structure, preposition use, and punctuation. Many sentences are ungrammatical or awkwardly phrased, such as 'it was evident that the highest physical acitivty done by 45 to 54 age group in women gender' and '15 to 64 age of women had increased in physical acitvity. it was 47.7 percetage to reached 53 percentage'. There are also frequent capitalization and missing-word issues (e.g., 'over 65 age group, it was observed nearly minor difference'). These recurring grammatical errors and faulty complex structures place this criterion at Band 5.0.
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